Yes Ann,
It indeed gave me food for thought.. and words for my pen.

regards
Samaira

Thanks for liking it.

Cheers
Samaira.

Yes I am an new member returning from the old site. Your warm welcome is appreciated.
I would like to evolve as a writer, hence I would need feedback and comments on my work. I would be glad to receive help from you.

About the poem.. I think that all human feelings may go through the cycle of being there and then not. but if the seed is planted somewhere deep down, it surely returns..
Thank you for your comment.

Regards,
Samaira.

Its strange that I read your comment just today.. Many thanks for the appreciation.

Cheers
Sam.

The nature of the tree was never a topic of my write.
The write was about the persistence of the single leaf against odds, and by looking at that leaf, I got strength to carry on. When it falls (inevitable during winters when all trees shed their leaves), a feeling of sadness grips me.
It was supposed to be a disappointment, and with the use of 'Alas', I tried to end it that way.

And I thought , by the comments of other members, that the message was conveyed... till i read your comment.

A sincere request :
I know for sure that my work is far from perfection, but I also know that all of it is not entirely bad. I would appreciate that once u write a crit, if you would also point out any good thing(s) about it along with the many weaknesses, it would probably not give me the feeling of despondency and motivate me to write better. If you only tell me about my weaknesses and not about the promising points about my writes, you would probably kill the budding writer inside me.

Another thing that you might want to consider is the fact that not everyone in the world has English as his native language, and the improvisation in writing might take slightly longer for them.

for rekindling my motivation to write. I was beginning to feel that probably I should put my pen down and first read the theory behind writing poems.
A child doesn't know how to walk.. he starts learning. It is obvious that he will fall. If the elders only tell him that he didn't take the step correctly,, and emphasize only his weakness, the child will obviously lose heart. If the elders help him get up and explain why he fell, that would probably be better for the growth of the child.

I am glad to be in the Pool with you Eddie, and I hope I will get out of it as a better writer.

Cheers!
Sam.

I am wondering if the use of this word is necessary?

regards
Sam.

Thank you for sending your love and thoughts to me. I am indeed amazed that just by changing a few words, we can look at the same poem in an entirely different perspective! For example here you have transformed the essence of the poem from sadness to hope and courage.

Thanks a lot.. Merci beaucoup.
Regards
Sam.

Thanks for your suggestion. It indeed reads better with the last two lines swapped !
Would love to receive your comments on my other writes as well.. after all, the essence of writing is to be read.

Regards
Sam.