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( Haiku )

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the poet is lost
cries for help in metaphor
none come to his aid

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I like it very apt.

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

thanks...this one almost sounds like the joke form "did you ever hear the one about a poet who got lost?"

Al

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of cryptic poetry. And therein lay between lines and rhymes
underneath the allusions and metaphor, a cry from deep within the poet,
I wonder if he really goes unheard. Or is his reader unable to send back
a suitable reply? A strong haiku.

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'Break, break break on thy cold grey stones, O Sea.'

there seems to be more in this than I consciously considered....that how it works sometimes....thank god, or somebody. I tend to think my stuff as more shallow than I wish it to be. I'm grateful when others perceive something of substence or relative depth. Bolstering my shakey poetic ego

thanks for your always mellifluous comments

Al

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of the poetic matter is that every person that takes pen to paper in poetry has a certain measure of depth to them, even the rhymesters and poeticules, which I don't find surprising but a relief. A depth in the shallows can be very brilliant as well. Keep that chin up Al, your poetic ego is in a safe haven.

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'Break, break break on thy cold grey stones, O Sea.'

Clever Haiku lol the matter of the metaphor? I heard from a wise teacher that nothing is right or wrong in poetry and I adhere to that lol of course it gets me into trouble with the purists but I've never been one to conform :)

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

thanks again for responding....

you have a beautiful and genuine smile

with respect

Al

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Thank you, I will take the compliment with the grace it was given :)

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

Good Haiku.

"Mataphor" = "Metaphor"?

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

thanks for the spelling correction....and the comment

Al

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Hello BL how are you. I just came across this and I read it once, twice, three times and there is a sublime message in it. Good Haiku. Lood forward to reading more of you.

Blessings
Mona

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