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Darkness of mind and soul

Darkness beckons to her, its long reaching fingers
touching her to her very soul
its the darkness to which she may not surrender
no matter how much sweeter the prospect

darkness invites her to come, and rest
darkness promises her to eternal, blissful rest
it assures her that her troubles will be left behind
no more pain to be felt, no more ties to bind

darkness, the sweet, eternal friend
when in fact it would be her final brutal end
the temptation to give in, to giver over to the darkness
is always present, as her life is in a constant mess

she feels she is drowning in the light
no one sees her, no one hears her plight
its ignorant bliss she wishes for, craves
yet she faces each day anew and always braves

the elements of her life, the constant beaten path
she seems to follow from day to grueling day
she wishes for a warm welcoming hearth
but she always, always seems to lose her way

she is lost, will she ever be found?
Will she ever again hear that sweet promising sound
of the light that is meant to have and hold
yet for her is carries the odor of the dank and cold

the light fades daily, hence the pending darkness
its the darkness that always theses days prevails
and she is sinking, sinking, sinking down, down
further away from this light, for the darkness prevails

Darkness of mind, darkness of soul
that which claims both the young and the very old
darkness you claim to be an ally, a friend
why then do you only bring about, her impending end?

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Welcome to Neopoet, "land of the free thinking poets"

This is very powerful, I was trapped in it for a moment. I felt myself spiraling down into it.
What a vivid write. the dark imagery is so real.
I love dark poetry but this is brutally scary.
Bravisima!! what a wonderful first post.

On a personal note If you get a chance,read "the four agreements" By don Miguel Ruiz. yes it's in English. A great book, because when someone can write this so real I worry a little. So just try the book if it's light in your life you want. this is not religous in the slightest way. I'm not the religous type, I believe in the power of the universe "Taoist"

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

Hi Eddie,

i had to smile at your line "because when someone can write this so real i worry a little", not because i found i funny, not in the least, but because it shows your genuine emapthy for another, and to set your mind at ease, this was written when i was going through an extremely dark time in my life, that time has almost passed, and i am in a better place now.

i will be on the look out for the book you have mentioned, thank you for that.

Yours in script

Feebie

Let life be your muse in all you do!!!

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I hope this is darkness of a fictitious type and it's prose feel makes it almost like you are having a conversation with the darkness in yourself. We all go to that place occasionally but hopefully the light and power is stronger than that for you.

Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

I am in a much better place since this piece, and i thank you for your kind words......

Let life be your muse in all you do!!!

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I like this poem, i'm very fond of a dark theme.

But I think that it would sound better if you didn't repeat the word 'darkness,' so often.

Apart from that i enjoyed the read.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

Hi Lou,

Thank you very much for the feedback and for taking the time out to read this write.

Feebie

Let life be your muse in all you do!!!

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Hi All,

Welcome to Neopoet from my side as well, I have been involved with Neopoet since 2007, and can honestly say it feels so good to be back.

To all of you who have taken the time to read this poem i thank you, some of the feedback was very humbling and thank you to all of you for the kind words.

May you all be very happy here on Neo, i know i was and will be once again...

Let life be your muse in all you do!!!

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this is the first time i am reading your poetry and surely it wont be the last...i found this one very emotive.,...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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