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abstract beauty

with slits for eyes he peers inside
those dusty corners in his mind
until he sees with certainty
the depths of his humanity
now laying there disheveled on the floor

remembrances of hoops and hurdles
leave sour tastes, like milk that curdles
and though he doesn't know it yet
this is a day he'll not forget
for it will be unlike those gone before

in brilliant beacons light explodes
that leads upon Damascus road
to light the path and guide the feet
until the day when souls shall meet
and we shall greet the one whom we adore

for those with eyes now blind to see
such treasures "their's" shall never be

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I love the imagery in this poem.

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

well executed sonnet with great imagery . Only alternative I have to offer is in L-12 you might change and to then...............scribbler

Scribbler , I don't believe this is a sonnet - wrong format

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the glimmer of sunshine on icicles

raj (sublime_ocean)

I don't know the format - but I like the message!
Nice write!
Boni

Bonitaj

And though I don't care much for format, this is a beautifully constructed poem. The scenes captured me. The message made me smile. And I do hope to read more of you soon:)

Yours

Waldo

Not sure what format this would actually be yet the write is indicative of an enlightening. Needn't have spiritual overtones except those that a discovery allows. Believing is a situational experience that changes with learning...faith is blind...awakening to see the light can be daunting. Even for those already aware of the significance ...Indi

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Thanks...such encouragement may actually provoke a new post...Indi

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