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SPRING ZEPHYR DAY
The trees are so active today
fanning the air and clouds around
as if they are all in a fray
and throwing pine cones to the ground
All the birds must prove their skill
at landing on the limbs which sway
whether on ridge or tiny rill
earning hazardous flight pay
The air is filled with pollen's haze
as tree pods release their loads
which will settle down for days
on ground, cars and even toads
I don't know what it is I like
about days tossed about by wind
but don your boots and we shall hike
among the blustery forest, my friend
Looked out the patio door at this windy day and jotted this down in about 10 minutes lol
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Structured: Western
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Comments
scribbler
Sun, 2011-04-17 08:37
hi Ian
Only a phenomenon with such universal appeal is given so many names. Not too many names for mud lol.........stan
scribbler
Sun, 2011-04-17 13:16
hello
Sometimes the senses flood i guess. Thanks for the visit....................stan