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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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what an abbreviated write on the need to put more effort into our lives.................lmao...........stan

He must have got up and flown away before I got here :P

"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche

It's as if you read into my mind! So intrigued that this touched everyone so. Just done a 19hr flight across the Atlantic from South Africa to D.C. and that's why this piece was conceptualized. Walked into an internet cafe at the aiport and posted it - then thought the better of it!
The rest as they say...
is history!
Really touched to hear from you all. Now go and read EE (Emotional Expression) my latest post and see if that throws any lights on what preceeded this!
ps. quite fun playing this Sherlock Holmes thing - even though it's not at all what I intended originally!


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