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Stampede

Give thanks for the courage
to be who you are,
Feel unashamed of your emotions.
Niceness is not a dirty word.

Gain strength from your vulnerabilities,
fuck those who don’t value and are
blind to your worth.

Learn from your mistakes,
If you allow yourself to be trodden on ,
Then make way for the oncoming stampede.

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Lou,

can't believe you've not had any comments on this one yet!

Second stanza - brilliant...and possibly ouch!

Last stanza, I think you need to make a slight change:

Learn from your mistakes,
If you allow yourself to be trodden on,
THEN make way for the ONCOMING stampede.

Just a thought.

regards,

HS

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Dan,

thank you, I'm really glad you like this one.

Second stanza , ouch !!!! Lol

I think you are correct about the last line , I will change it.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Louise, a strong message in this write
"Gain strength from your vulnerabilities,
fuck those who don’t value and are
blind to your worth.",,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

Pleased that you like it.

Thanks Bud

Love Louise xx

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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very nice, I love the last paragraph

You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down

thanks

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Thanks i'm glad that you enjoyed it.

much love lou xx

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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thanks

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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