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I bounce along this gravel track
it's been too long but now I'm back
to walk along this river's shore
one hundred yards wide, maybe more

The current is now in full flight
at places the water runs pure white
over shoals, stones, logs and more
with a robust steady roar

The scaly birches dip their limbs
which bow and sway with currents whims
as they brush the surface like a broom
in the shaded shoreline's gloom

It's midsummer yet I shiver
as a cool breeze blows off the river
one of the things which draws me here
beside this torrent wild and clear

Within the flow I watch the trout
as they feed and swim about
or station where the water's slack
by boulders and stone face's crack

They float to the surface film and snatch
emerging mayflies as they hatch
but disappear like frightened deer
whenever striped bass come near

The osprey and kingfisher dives
to catch catfish or alewives
Their keen eyes rewarded for their search
with shad and bream, perhaps a perch

And the loons and ducks and geese
honk,cry and quack disturbing peace
as they fly above the river's trace
each with a different kind of grace

But now the water level drops
and all the frenzied feeding stops
drowned stones and ledges reappear
as the river runs away from here

Turbines stop turning one by one
for now their time of work is done
soon the river ebbs into deep pools
as raging rapids become drools

Soon the river's quiet and still
mighty current reduced to a mere rill
the world is calm as if waiting
for the next power generating

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Some times I use and too much and too frequently and where not needed lmao. Thanks and I'll give this consideration and deep thought in my edit and probably take your advice and try to beware using and too I can't stop now and ............................stan

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thank you, i just write what I see.....................stan

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my eyes and ears

reading you
brings in my eyes tears
why can't i write so ?

then a voice within me speaks
oh fool!

he is on AEC!

where ru uuuuuuuu????


We all write in different ways lol. i fear if I'm unlucky enough to be elected to AEC, I'll have far less time to write. 'course this would be a good thing for readers lol............stan

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