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Traveling Light In Journey of Life

If I become You
And You happen to be Me
We will still be US

Will anything change
Or will it still be the same
Between two of Us?

Even if I be Me
And you choose to remain You
Be empathetic

Then we will know more
about how to build bridges
with compromises

Life is a journey
Without a return ticket
Who knows when it ends

Let us travel light
without being too burdened
with excess baggage

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thank you for the read and nice to know you found them inspiring...

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Great job. loved how you expressed your thoughts and feelings in this one> Spot on for me tonight

Mona
xox

in fact i wasnt able to come up with any poetry..so i started with a haiku and just went on building on it sequentially...good to know you liked them....we all need to be compassionate and prepared to make compromises in life don't we?...

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Thank you for the read ...you did hit the spot with your understading its essence i have tried to bring out..yes it has two sides to it....the better of the two is that whosoever it be with ...the journey of life is enjoyable if there is compassion and compromise and if one is free of excess baggage of misunderstnading or such other negative influences...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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In this piece, you remind us that there is always two sides to every story. (at least) Life is a journey, and we can make it hard or easy, with our attitude. I cannot pick out favorite lines as they are all so very good.

love, Cat

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thank you for the read and appreciating the essence i was trying to bring out in the write....good to know from the comments that i could do so...

love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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"Let us travel light
without being too burdened
with excess baggage" ..........You're right!!

So many people cannot put themselves in the shoes of others and see the different point of view, they charge through life and miss the interchange of understanding, so sad, they cannot truly love anyone else but themselves. You said it well here Raj.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

Thank you for the read and very elaborate comments about the theme of this write...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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you are right...i read the poem you wrote about the accident..good to know you both are safe...wishing you both a wonderfull journey ahead....thank you for the read and appreciative comment..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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thank you for your kind comment ...

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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