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Awakenings (eddy styx)

Awakenings

All winter my true nature lay
dreaming among the warm-blooded bodies of
my many memories,
Waiting for this moment of Spring
to arrive and revive me with the scent
of fresh prey.
Being a creature of many disciplines
I have learned to school my emotions
behind a colorless mask.
I have my many rules to abide by,
and I am nothing if not constant.
I never hunt in the Winter months,
for there are too many variables
and frailties of body... a sniffle
or sneeze will give intent away in
a heartbeat. Not to mention the footprints
left behind at the scene.
Still I have been amused by the
other school of thought; to incorporate
ice in the art of the kill, because
the evidence melts.

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Another poem for the "Book of Styx II" I am posting this one today in honor of Spring's arrival. For those of you who don't know, eddy styx is my alter ego, eddy styx, the stalker and serial killer.
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Thanks so much for your vote of confidence. This piece will be going into "The Book of Styx II" I hope you are well and without a Spring cold and flu. This is the season!

Love, Cat

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LOL... a leg of lamb! excellent!

Always, eddy ( and Cat)

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Yes an alter ego is very freeing! You should give it a try. Thanks for your comment.

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you have delivered a lot of punches in this write...and ended it with a killer punch in these lines...

Still I have been amused by the
other school of thought; to incorporate
ice in the art of the kill, because
the evidence melts

it is a treat to read your skillfull writing....

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

I'm so glad to have entertained you with my styxian alter ego! Thank you!

love, eddy (and cat)

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Your answer is in an e-mail. Looking forward to it! Thanks for the invite!

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i would look forward to read the concoction you two would be coming up..you have titillated my imagination about "the bad things" you two would be co-writing about.....

raj (sublime_ocean)

We are working on it now!

love, Cat

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this is fantastic to read, after reading the first few lines
thinking those are the ones I would quote then the next
few were just as good and so on, but I could not leave
without giving these lines back to you
"Being a creature of many disciplines
I have learned to school my emotions
behind a colorless mask." I can't find the words to describe
this powerful forceful read
these line set the tone at the start of the read so perfectly
"All winter my true nature lay
dreaming among the warm-blooded bodies of
my many memories,,,,,,,,,love it all cat ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

It is so glad to have you back! I hope you had a great vacation and have come back to us refreshed. You were sorely missed here!

love, eddy (and cat)

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Cat,

I'm sorry that I can not offer any suggestions, I can only read and enjoy, your great talent.

Much Love Lou xx

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

Thanks so much for reading, commenting and enjoying!

love, eddy (and cat)

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Thanks for everything. I am slowly getting back to my old self, although the short term memory still needs some help. I hope you are well.

love, eddy (and cat)

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What can I say! I was just pulled along by the story. It was a joy to read - I would say more but everyone has said it - and I concur with the comments above.

Lovely to read Eddy's work.

Love Mand xxxxxxx

It is lovely to see you here among my comments :) Thanks for your faith in me.

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