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Ikebana
Ikebana…
What order do you restore
in my tormenting life,
gaining my most trusted love.
Around you discipline
emanates with ease,
contenting carefully.
Your talent turns troubles away
peace unconsciously conveyed,
time will heal you state.
Perfect actions seem to
carry the hour with a worth,
driving home the cut.
Within your reason there’s
no rush, your voice calm
but firm, so silences
those with doubt.
Pruning such painful edges
that try to obscure feelings,
returning me from fret’s frown.
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Foresting a life saver, with such a careful style..
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Comments
Roscoe Lane
Fri, 2011-03-18 18:16
Thank you,
Thank you for your comments, i can't change a you suggested. What i mean in that line is you state, as in a persons statement. Time will heal you state. Hope thats clear. Regards Roscoe..
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
Kailashana2
Fri, 2011-03-18 06:33
for you Roscoe....
for you Roscoe....
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BIapgk7ordc&feature=related
~A
Roscoe Lane
Fri, 2011-03-18 18:19
Thank you,
Thank you Anna, Love Roscoe
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
Bonitaj
Fri, 2011-03-18 10:02
wow ROSCOE!
and there I thought you were speaking of some beautiful Japanese-type lady!
Good write!
Boni
Bonitaj
Roscoe Lane
Fri, 2011-03-18 18:22
Maybe,
Maybe a subliminal message, thank you for your comment. Regards Roscoe..
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.