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WHAT TRUTH

Eyes express horror with tears
when pointless words fail,
unmitigated disaster derailed
the daily news what truth to refuse.

Opinionated reporters, propaganda confused
immersed in beliefs, common ground
parting reef, truth the giver that
seeks the thief pressurised relief.

Venting reprisal, the undeniable
revealed history conceived
rebuffed to confuse
the moral choose.

Bound and gagged by rules
taught in everyday common schools
opinions abused, thought as much to allude
the unaccountable that protrude.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Your back Yay !!

Great work as usual, I cant see anything I'd change.

Much love Louise xx

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

hey there, cheers for the comment
glad you like this one ,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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cheers for the comment , neo has no spoken section yet I think
lol, cheers for the thumbs up am so glad you like it ,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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I fear the truth is hidden from us, there are certain people who want control. They manipulate the media, as well as schools and the workplace, telling us what they want us to hear. Your poem is correct, just what is the truth. Great write.Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

" just what is the truth " is exactly the question
I was just thinkings out of the box on this one lol
they say the truth shall set us free
but who asks what real truth is ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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Zigs,

you really make this piece interesting. Your failure to use grammar makes this superb, as you can read different meanings into the lines depending on where the reader decides one line finishes and the next starts. This structure is difficult to do and you are the only one I know of who can produce this style and leave the reader in awe of the subject.

I don't think it needs any alterations from where I sit.

Love this stanza:

Bound and gagged by rules
taught in everyday common schools
opinions abused, thought as much to allude
the unaccountable that protrude.

The 'bound & gagged' truly shows how we think we are free, but actually are fettered in chains that we can't see.

I really like this piece, from a subject, and structure point of view and as for the meaning behind the words...I get it, believe it and bow to your excellence in this writing.

Good job my friend,

HS

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hood, you summed this write up with this "The 'bound & gagged' truly shows how we think we are free, but actually are fettered in chains that we can't see. you should use this " we are free but fettered in chains that we can't see"
I like that, you know me. I STRIVE to be different, as I have no interest in saying the same old thing in the same old way, my style is hard to explain it just makes sense to me lol, I find it hard to take praise it must be the Irish
in me lol, ,,,,,,,,cheers dan your comments do always interest me either way ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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I usually listen for what isn't said,
it seems to be of more value than what is ...

this one causes one to think Ziggy,
and that's always a good thing.

Richard

glad you got to read , cheers
yes listening to what isn't said
I do a bit of that too, am glad it makes one think ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,cheers ,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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Bound and gagged by rules
taught in everyday common schools
opinions abused, thought as much to allude
the unaccountable that protrude.

From the very start of our educations we are taught not to think outside the constraints of the curriculum. Indeed we are often punished for having thoughts of our own and even more so for challenging the status quo. Bravo, my dear friend!

love, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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you hit the nail on the head you got this one straight away
my thoughts exactly cheers cat have a good weekend ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs x
I like that stanza too,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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