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Messy As Hell

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earth
still juvenile
with its volcanic complexion
shimmy-shakey dances
huff 'n puffin' ways
thrashing
pounding
explosive
tantrums

Mother earth?

more like
a rude little twirp

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I like the style in which this little piece (with big meaning) is composed. My favorite lines are:

Mother earth?

more like
a rude little twirp

whimsey on a serious subject. I like it!

always, Cat

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thanks for taking the time to comment. I do appreciate it very much.

Al

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I've thought of earth's eruptions and earthquakes as an attempt to shake us parasites off. We're destroying the earth, and it's only trying to defend itself. ;-)

It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

Thanks for your thoughts. My thoughts on the matter: no matter what we humans do, the earth will regenerate itself, although we will probably not be around to witness that glorious time

Al

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However, awareness was here from the beginning, will always be reforming itself into the reality appearing...

I'm not sure humans are the epitome of consciousness, though I feel that we're still going through birth pangs.

Cool poem. Hot topic. ;-)

~A

thank you for your insightful thoughts.

Al

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I liked this. It's a good thing the earth is still a child as its burps are our atmosphere lol..................scribbler

thanks for stopping by. glad you liked this

Al

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