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RUDE LITTLE BOY
Look at that boy over there
running about in underwear
all he does is yell and shout
throwing insults all about
Expecting EVERYTHING to go his way
and Always wants the final say
if he doesn't he throws a fit
he'll hold his breath,stomp feet, and spit
Any wonder other children frown
turn their backs, cast their eyes down
when they see him coming their way
ready to disrupt their play ?
See all the kids on the play ground
happy groups scattered all around
save one little boy whose rude ways
keep him alone on most days
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Structured: Western
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scribbler
Wed, 2011-03-16 11:01
LOL
the little boy is now to old to be spanked........at least as a form of punishment lol............stan
author commentCandlewitch
Wed, 2011-03-16 12:00
Dear Stan,
I know a little boy who has acted like this since he was a toddler. I don't think he has ever had a spanking in his life, just a few time outs. I cringe whenever he is around. Sadly, he is a part of my extended family, so I see him fairly often.
love, Cat
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scribbler
Wed, 2011-03-16 12:24
hello
I know what you mean. And these little boys become "men" who still act the same...............stan
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