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Assiduous Beliefs

Submitted by press on Sat, 2011-03-12 23:25

Assiduous Beliefs

How much of life do we think we control
Destiny is preordained beyond interpretation
Choices are the test. For solidarity the peace of mind and soul

Belief in ones purpose is the hardest road

Pronouncement is simply the faith that we are here to learn
Pronouncement is simply the Proclamation of why we are born

Belief is the only part of life we control

Only ones ignorance will be seduce by pride
Sincerity can be imprudent, by ones belief in their selfish rights
So be assiduous in questions that you decide
There are decisions, that only destiny will provide

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Comments

magics02

Sun, 2011-03-13 15:03

I love where you are at with your poetry Boni. There is one wee thing Magic seen here in this line
will be seduce by pride

(seduced) minor tweak

I like how you write for your reader all your readers to contemplate. Good job gal. Hope all has been well by you over the missed months..

Regards
Mona

press

Mon, 2011-03-14 23:53

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hey Mona or magics02 thanks 4 U R love & time to make a comment my name is Pressley and its nice to meet U. And always remember that I will never view a comment as a personal assessment of my writing / And I will always consider a comment as a act of love , help , a tool to learn from

Lov2U Press

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