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TEMPEST( mixed meter for Wes' shop)

All thunder and heavy rain
mere minutes in the past
sun now shining,'twas in vain
fierce storms seldom last

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Dear Scribbler,

This is purely delightful!!! And so true. It put me in mind of a summer storm that arises quickly, does it's damage and dissipates just as fast as it came.

always, cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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tempests not in the form of weather also pass quickly. Thanks for coming by...............stan

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thank you on both counts...............stan

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Like a tempest even gas passes..........................stan

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how one can apply images of weather as metaphor to one's own experiences, so easily yet so subtlely.
This one's very good, I would change not a thing.

Respectfully, Jim

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The secret to fewer changes----------shorter writes lol. I am glad you caught the double meaning.......stan

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sounds like you are in the midst of spring.

vexations

good to see you again. The calendar says still winter but the maples and pear trees say spring. Thanks for dropping by....................scribbler

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Sorry I'm late, I didn't realize.

always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

not late at all and thank you................stan

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I Think this is a mix of anapest and Iambic heavy on Iambic

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