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Truth

Rights are mere excuses
When used for harming others,
never hurting anyone
eases the pain of all.

Relationships are not destroyed
when sacrificing rights,
for real and willing sacrifice
brings family success.

Silence in the face of threat
is civilized forebearance,
pursuing things important
in hearts of one and all
is no tyranny but service.

What is right for none but I
destroys friendships and marriages,
natural rights to courteous respect
mean little in the face
of spiteful nastiness.

Using right to freely speak violates
the lives and hopes of all
when that speech hurts and denigrates,

and gains of living free are empty
when honor starts ignoring truth:
for at the end of all that's said,
none benefit from compassion's dearth.

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Free verse
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I really like what this says and right now it is time for me and the verandah. I will be back to give better crit. What I read here is full of TRUTH. And exbounded on in reality. I shall come back Race. I am race-to-go now:)

Magics

I know why.

Glad you enjoyed it, Oz Lady.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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Okay what I was saying here is these are almost like quotes and good ones at that.

This part shines for me:

Using right to freely speak violates
the lives and hopes of all
when that speech hurts and denigrates, (spot on)

and gains of living free are empty
when honor starts ignoring truth: ( you may delete semi-colon)

and I thought this ending line here,

none benefit from compassion's dearth.

Upon first read I thought it to almost say compassions death.

Just my wee take on it and I like it for it speaks to all of us in one way or another and you displayed your feelings and true as they are so freely. Very nice free verse. I hand you a shake on this work. I wish I could be so prolific in my free verse. Great job and thanks for this one. Made me to twink, no I meant think:)

Regards
Mona

I still say you should give it a go for AEC, you have the interest of the site in the right mind. You have my vote.

I am happy that you enjoyed it so much.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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Dear Jim,

This is about the raw truth! I love what you have done with this piece, especially these lines:

and gains of living free are empty
when honor starts ignoring truth:
for at the end of all that's said,
none benefit from compassion's dearth.

love, cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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I wrote this in a fit of emotional pique, to drain away some real ugliness that I was feeling.
I'm very glad that you enjoyed this so much!

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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Yes, it drained it away entirely. It almost always does, when I write about my own failings, as I did here.
Leaves me feeling rather stupid, too!
LOL
Thanks hun.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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Thanks Shirl,
How right you are.

Happy you enjoyed the read!

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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Glad you enjoyed it.
I don't think Truth is strange at all.
But how we interpret it sure can be!
Thanks Bee,

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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