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Transition
In the moment of emergence
as her wings are still drying
the butterfly weeps
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
change is inevitable but letting go isn't always easy :)
Editing stage:
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Comments
faerybeki
Fri, 2011-03-04 07:31
Thank You Shirl :) glad you
Thank You Shirl :) glad you enjoyed it, much love Beki xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
author commentKailashana2
Fri, 2011-03-04 06:45
Lovely haiku, Beki. I almost
Lovely haiku, Beki. I almost wish there were more words to give her flight. ;-)
~A
faerybeki
Fri, 2011-03-04 07:36
Thank you A :) believe me,
Thank you A :) believe me, there were almost more words but I stopped myself :) wanted to stay focused in the moment of transition, the space between one life and the next, if that makes sense... much love, Beki xxxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
author commentKINGZOMBIE
Fri, 2011-03-04 07:06
A tender moment captured
I'm still grasping the idea of haiku, but i found this to be quite lovely.Thanks for sharing it.
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"For what is it to die, But to stand in the sun and melt into the wind?"
faerybeki
Fri, 2011-03-04 07:38
Thank you King zombie :) glad
Thank you King zombie :) glad you felt the tenderness here, you sum up Haiku well, 'a moment captured' for me that's what they are :) much love Beki xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
author commentAyaz Warith
Fri, 2011-03-04 11:34
Dear Beki, this Haiku stirs
Dear Beki, this Haiku stirs me to write one...perhaps this is one of the best pieces I have read here.
Thanks for sharing
Regards
Ayaz
faerybeki
Fri, 2011-03-18 10:35
Ayaz, so sorry it's taken
Ayaz, so sorry it's taken ages to acknowledge your comment, I'm tempted to say you can't have read much here lol but will just say thank you :) happy if this piece inspired you, much love Beki xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
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