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DEGE

DEGE

If I compare myself
to Bukowski, Burroughs, Poe or Thompson

Take it not as literary self-aggrandizement

Just that in many ways I made them all look like wowsers

and yet will probably live fifty years or more than any of them.

I've contracted a terrible disease.
Where I expected to be immortal,
I now know I have
DEGE
Degenerative Elven Genetic Enhancement

oh woe
alack alas
I won't live forever,
nor my poetry.

But I'll have a fucking great time doing it.

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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My doctor is disgusted with how healthy I am. All the physical pain of the last few weeks turned out to be costachondritus, it is just an inflammation between some of the ribs caused by heavy lifting.
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good you are ok I was able to hear the happiness from your voice today

Intelligent work

well done ;)

Mona Rose

Told you the elf is irrepressible and here you had your doubts!

Hugs.

~A.

Now I don't want to seem ungrateful but have I mentioned that your icon "keep right" could be interpreted as an exhortation towards fascism/Nazism etc, as in left and right wing politics?
Or are you just being a shit-stirrer like me?

cheers,
Jess
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those big balls. Or all that heavy thinking, you've been doing. LOL. Good to see you so disgustingly healthy, I guess we can look forward to many more years Elfin mischief, ~ Gee

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