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Malediction

My dad was a man of many words,
Unfortunately most of them consisted of profanity.
But it didn’t stop him clipping an ear,
or the side of your head, if as children we produced vulgarity.

He would weave sentences so intricate and clever,
constructed entirely of, Fuck, shit and wanker,
that left a person astounded,
that made neighbours scatter.

If a clergy man passed by, the air was azure with blasphemy
and thick with malediction.
he made it quite an art,
And took great delight in his addiction.

My mother was often mortified,
and was known to stutter,
For god sake when you grow up kids,
Don’t’ you dare swear, do not inherit this affliction.

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This is based on my dad , who did swear a lot, but not to this degree.
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If a clergy man passed by, the air was azure with blasphemy
and thick with malediction.
he made it quite an art,
And took great delight in his addiction.

suggestions: clever instead of cleaver?

And even made that made neighbours scatter. (something wrong with this sentence)

or the side of your head, if as a children we produced vulgarity

if as children (remove "a")

Your father sounds like quite the character and I'll bet you have many fond memories and stories about him.

Love, Cat

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Thank you, character is one word for him. LOL!!!

Love Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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thank you

love lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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I think many can relate to this, Thanks for sharing it.Also, I didn't know that "wanker" was profane.

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Thanks , yes to wank is to jerk off lol

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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my dad was a violent man, but we didnt get beaten as kids, maybe a clip round the ear at most. my mum got the beatings

love lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Thank you so much.

Love Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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