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Sweetness

I eat plastic noodles
to remember, the imaginary scent of December
sipping at chilli soup in my bed rags
your artificial smell
loving up my bed hair.

I fell into her bed right there
your feelings for me spindled around me
like a little moat of clouds
of hot, fresh steam
that balanced eagerly
in pure thin air.

I had stole all her blankets by sunrise
inside she knew how cold I felt,
I am a lone sherpa
rolling
for an infinite
down snow plains of blackened cave beats
subtle and repetitive;
I wanted to fall into your arms
and I felt more like a baby
now than ever.

She peached and plummed
acted like my small candle of miniature hopes
that things might cook well
that final trams should come quickly and on time
and a distraction
feeding me spiders that were found wondering the garden
covered them in chocolate;
I want to be covered in chocolate
and I want to squeal
until nobody can hear me
and I am gone
into something like her sweetness.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Honey, I'm home.
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Comments

Good Lord, thank you for your arrival. I have been waiting for such a one as you.

~A

we are ads
carpathians
flash and slumber

how they hammered through stone
patient and tireless
at the Colisuem for the iron
holds in the columns
"Fuck the earthquakes.. keep chiselling man"

easier then minning in the dark far beneath
the land

You know your words
the moves oiled

I appreciate your works

where are the battle tested
poets
the machinery that forecasts

let us ponder and write
and recover

Thank You

I feel like asking "who are you?". You are the most exciting new poet on the site for a while.

Don't worry. Soon the effusiveness will stop and the critique set in.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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