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Libyan Socialist Mona

Tears run freely down my face.

I am hearing of violence and upheaval in your country.

This athiest prays deeply for your safety,

my dearest friend,

if you you need to leave your country

I will do all I can to help.

If I can come there and help with the struggle

I will

You have saved my life with your love and compassion

I will not be powerless.

Tell me what is happening

and what I can do.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
I am hearing this on the media, I don't know the truth
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I have also been thinking of her during this time of upheaval in her country. I will add my prayers to yours for her safety...................scribbler

Mona has truly saved my life in my darkest moments with her love, compassion and support.

cheers,
Jess
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and a courageous critique. Just what Neopoet needs. Yes, it is more of letter than a poem.
But, to use a cliche I abhor, it is from the heart, and I don't think I will edit it.

Sometimes artifice can take away from the original meaning.

Again, I applaud your courage in this critique,
thank you,

cheers,
Jess
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talking to her now on the phone! You know what is happening? The USA and Arabian Press have sent in agent provacateurs to cause trouble, but Qaddafi called on his people to come into the streets to show solidarity and they did in their thousands and it was given no press coverage!

A good friend thinks Foxtel tells the truth but that is fucking idiocy.

cheers,
Jess
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Very very glad she is ok.

One of these days the *news* will be intelligent enough to know most folks have friends all over the world and are in communication with them via internet and youtubes, etc., communiques that
speak the truth and not Americana distortion and intrigue.

~A

About the way her country is being presented in the Western Press. Wonder why? Tunisia and Egypt were corrupted by the IMF, but Libya has been an independent socialist state since Muammar al-Gaddafi, he is not a dictator, he is a revolutionary leader. It is only a wonder that the west has taken so long to attack him. No, not a wonder, he has the support of his people and the Western Press are using the uprisings in Tunisia and Egypt to put him in the same position. A complete lie.

cheers,
Jess
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So, what else is news?

Thanks my dear Jess that was too kind of a real friend like you ,I'm too proud of our friendship.

my dear poets for more details read my blog entry and the poem

http://new.neopoet.com/node/2562

http://new.neopoet.com/node/2561

love you all

Mona Rose

Stay safe mona, and keep the news coming while you can. Love Roscoe

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

I have to ask this of you in this line in your grand letter to our writer Mona and your dear friend here.

(if you you need to leave your country)

How about a comma or omitting one of you's

I think your heart came out in this one and I am sure Mona loves it.
I too hope she is well, her and her entire family

Magics Mona

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