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MOCKING WORDS

Opinions form before words
they swarm every syllable
subjected to recourse the
hollow hoarse, what else
of course.

Reasons fall victim to treason
upon any plinth that shatters,
the faithful rally not now
don't dilly dally.

The brave never behave
fame etched here on the
grave, remembered in verse
departed yet still belong.

I digress at your behest
my time in passing I won't
invest, subjected but none
the less beyond the intersection
of interaction may well detest.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 

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what form this adheres to, But I think I get the gist of it. I believe that you are saying, that unless you speak against something, and risk being called a rebel / hero, you will never stand for something. Don't flip-flop, and don't waste time, just say what you feel. ~ Geezer

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hi I just noticed a bit of me in what you see in this which is interesting
you are right in what you get from this but there is a little more meaning,
I CAN be very to the point but mostly keep my opinions to my self lol
except when I write ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
I am glad you stopped by to my page cheers Gee ,,,,,,,,,have a good weekend ,,,,,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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Zigs,

having already seen this prior to posting, I have no critique to offer that I haven't already.

I like the theme and fully understand where you are coming from and going to with this piece.

All-in-all, a tidy job...in true 'ziggish' style.

regards,

HS

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Yes you have given your critique on this one cheers for that.
ZIGGY style is all I know lol cheers ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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You know how i feel about this poem.
Had to read again

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

yes I sent this to you too,
I am glad you approve, cheers
for the edit ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs x

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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sorry for my late reply, I am mad busy of late
the pen speaks for all of us here ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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sorry for my late reply, I am mad busy of late
the pen speaks for all of us here ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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I digress at your behest
my time in passing I won't
invest, subjected but none
the less beyond the intersection
of interaction may well detest.

I like this very much. Sometimes I just get tongue-tied and the right thing to say abandons me until after the fact. Later with my keyboard, I am much more eloquent! Damn it all!

love, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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cat hope your well I have being since, am mad busy as I am trying to get work completed before I go to Spain
on the 6th for 11 days, I am glad you got to see this one, I was just thinking you on your keyboard hood on vocals
and I with my guitar with all 15 cords or so could form a band but who's lyrics lol would kick ass or what lol,,,,,,,
,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs x

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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Welcome to the World Domination Tour with:

Zigs and the Hooded Cat!

regards,

HS

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HOOD your quick of the mark with that response lol
I'd love to have us jam some time it would be class
well ye would I'd be crap lol ,,,,,,,,,,zigs ,,,,,,we would
need a name for the band ?????? it would have to
be something dark and pagan lol

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

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Zigs,

the band name needs to incorporate what we write...so how about:

Lyrically Speaking or Poetically Speaking.

First album: Poetry In Motion

World Tour: Poetry In Motion Tour

Lol!

HS

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