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ice melts
fog rises
the pond is gone

frightened
wings swooshing
geese has landed

I am
still running
shores of my past

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How was my language use?
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Comments

Mow I understand that why in a comment to Stan you had humorously mentioned that at times you start from end to beginning which seems to be the case here because your stanza # 3 is very powerful and i believe the heart of this poem for which obviously you have preferred not to have any specific Title...

Regards...

PS I believe npo one other than me is using the "select if your comment is your official critique" option...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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