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My Pen Hand

My magical hand turn letters
and words into poetry. My pen
hand is priceless, my talented
utensil on my torso is not to
ever be abused nor misused.

I spend hours with my pen hand
burning words into paper. My mind
is steaming with visionaries. My
dreamland in which no other person
can conquer. My imagination churns
my hand with pen solder ink with paper.

When my scribe is finished, I have a
piece of wording I can be most proud of,
I have it published for all people to enjoy.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 

Comments

I see you made this one more personal , I do like it
the first verse is my fav , but I think the use of the word
" my" is a little over done used ten times I think but that
can be easily changed if you so wish so , where you say
" my talented utensil on my torso is not to ever be abused " could become
A talented utensil on this torso is never to be abused ,,,,,,, and so on
but don't take my word on it lol, cheers ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

Thank you for your advice. I had no idea that I used "my" that many times
I tried to make it more personal. I hope it at least did that. Thank you again
for taking the time to critque my poem. The more advise I get the better I get.
I will take that advice and run with it. Thank you again for taking time to comment
on my poem. Thank you.

Friends,

Pixee

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if I can be of any help just message me here any time
when I am writing if I use a word more than once I circle
it till I have finished writing and then go back and think of another
word it works for me ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

I will take you up on your offer I can use all the help I can.
You will be the first I ask for help. You are the only one to
offer. Thank you for your help my friend. Take care,

Poetry is the living soul of a poet.
by Pixee

Pixee

author comment

hi there I am no expert but I am just a Pm away
I got loads of help from neo so it's just a bit of
give and take chat soon ,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

I like this but have a few ideas. The number of "my"'s would not be as noticeable if the word was not always at the start of a sentence. Also I believe arms are between a torso and hands (except in cases of birth defect). I trust you can make this a much better poem with a bit of thought................scribbler

Thank you for your critiquing my poems. I did look at my poem
and I agree 100% that I had to many MY's in it. I just tried to
make it my own. I did that sorta but much to many MY's.
I thank you for bringing that to my attention. I will keep that
in mind in the futrue poems I will write. Thank you for
your time to critique my poem. It makes me just that more
of a poet.

Poetry is the liviing soul of a poet.
Pixee

Friends,

Pixee

author comment

I think i will try the workshop. I don't think it won't hurt me.
I know I could use the help. Thank you for mentioning
it to me.

Poetry is the living soul fo the writer.
Pixee

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