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Angry Senryu

I'm feeling angry
for no apparent reason
so please, fuck right off

Style / type: 
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
oh dear I am in a bad mood ;) rrraaaaaarrrr got to let it out somewhere though eh? hoping to transform it into joy eventually :)
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i liked the forthrightness of this haiku...hitting the nail right on its head....

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thanks raj, wasn't sure how it would go down, just needed to get it out :) much love Beki xxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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Should I dare mention this would actually be a senryu. If not - I'll just stay back here out of sight. ;-)

It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

lol :) and thanks for pointing that out, I did wonder :) title changed ,you can come out from behind the sofa now, much love Beki xxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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Well I say *uck you
and your little doggie too,
love, the wicked witch

Is this a senyru or a haiku?

Oh, something wicked this way comes and it's heading straight for you: A BAD POEM!
Batten down the hatches! Bring out the cruicifix, holy water and the picture post cards,
it's time for an exorcism. ;-)

~A

Are we not in Kansas anymore? ;) much love Beki xxx ps maybe it's a hybrid x

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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better pissed off than pissed on lol...................scribbler

indeed, scribbler, indeed :) much love Beki xxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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LMAO

"so, please, fuck right off!"
I love this line.

Sweet Lady, be angry more often, this is worth it!

LOL

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

Thanks Jim, but I'm not so sure, I don't think it suits me :) much love Beki xxx

'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)

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