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Mountain Cattle

Let me explain the title -

Mountain cattle = Highland cows
Scottish vernacular; cow = coo
Coos on mountain side = high coos

Fresh snowdrops shiver.
North wind rages at new growth;
Not yet time for spring.

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Structured: Eastern
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This is too coo.............l!

Submit it somewhere, please!

~A

Its bloody cool all right, up in the highlands in winter!
Glad you enjoyed. Where do I submit these ravings?

Love
Ian xx

TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA

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My mind is wandering this morning so I did not put the title and the vernacular together at first.

Then I read the explanation aloud and chuckled.

As far as the poem, well done.

The first line is striking and sets a good tone and the use of "rages" in the second line is spot on. The only suggestion I have for the poem at this time is the consideration of a semi-colon at the end of line 2 rather than a period to create a pause rather than a stop.

As far as the title, I like Mountain Cattle but you might want to try out your "High Coos" to see how it plays.

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Jonathan Moore

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Just some more of my convoluted attempts to be amusing, Jonathan, glad it gave you a laugh.
I agreee with your punctuation suggestion. Good to see you again, still have plans for Irish tour?

Regards

Ian

TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA

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I do, but they have been delayed a year so I am looking at 2012.

Unless, of course, my books sell millions of copies and Top Gear or Graham Norton flies me over to be on a show.

That's more of a dream than an expectation, especially a lap around the track in a reasonably priced car.

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Jonathan Moore

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"coo" is "a dog" in scots gaelic! (cu)...

thus

"Stoned dog"

But I feel you, lol.

The old men used to say

"Hi coos ower yon brae"

LOL

very funny, Tam!

I do like your "mountain cattle". You capture the end of scottish winter very well.

Respectfully, Jim

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My grannie used to recite a children's ditty which went :

Looky ! looky ! Dere De Go !
Forty buses in a row !
'Em no buses - 'em are trucks !
See whits in 'em !
Coos an' ducks !

Oh, for those long - lost days steeped in the great culture. LOL

Glad you enjoyed, Jim

Ian

TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA

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