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Song of the Stars
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Sing, through the flowing tears,
And laugh though it aches,
ask again for love in rejection's face
into the sun's first brilliant rays
Peer into that song and hear its heart
take along these raindrops' prisms
let them glow in the dark of night
its tune your comfort and companion
Hold your friend deep within your soul,
journey into the promise tomorrow holds,
fear fades with the passing of the storms,
the clouds disperse in the breath of hope.
Sleep softly, gently sing your lullaby
Wipe those tears that no one spies.
For sure your smile glows bright gold
in the sun's fading glory at twilight's dawn.
Into the distant shimmering sea
let dreams sail into the misty dusk
fond thoughts and dewdrop wishes
cared for by the twinkle of starry nights.
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Tue, 2011-02-08 14:25
Sweet heart
u may..... breathe
OR
u you may like to take a ...breath
LOVELY VERSE URS
IT GRIPES MY INNERS
BEAUTIFUL WORDS SPOKEN
URS FRIENDLY
NEOPOET SCIENTIST
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Psyve
Fri, 2011-02-11 09:14
Crypticboard
A gentle poem and a good theme.
I enjoyed the read. As I was reading, i found a part of me was looking for a rhyme... and I realised why: this poem would work pretty wonderfully as a song! Something about the way it has been constructed gives it the feel of a rock classic.... like "Send me an Angel" by the Scorpions.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1UUYjd2rjsE
Thank you for sharing this one...
Psyve
Kailashana2
Fri, 2011-02-11 09:31
Scorpions, my daughter and I
Scorpions, my daughter and I shared love of their songs, and Journey. At that age we had little in common, my rebellious one...
Your poem reminds me of what is best in our too short, angst-filled lives, when we have touched
the art of touching.
If there were improvements to be made, only a songwriter, I think, has the wherewithal.
~A
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Fri, 2011-02-11 13:47
AlL Scorpions are Serpents
Scorpions All
All scorpions are
Venomous beings,
On earth
As in heaven
Rarely,
Very rarely if at all,
Do they lead blissful lives?
Nor do them
Appreciate others,
You are an angel
And you know it,
Great verses
You create
Friendly
Mate...
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