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Rewrite of poems or pieces (relativity workshop)

Have tried for a few times to find the original of :-

Off-Network (rewrite for BlueDemon77 Relativity Workshop)

I am sorry but this just made it past my scope for taking things in and assessing both writes.

I tried at first to find the original, then that having been done, after a lot of reading and time wasted.

I tried to compare the two Putting them one under the other, then as two columns side by side to read the changes.

Then I lost the plot somewhere, if these two had been put on the same page first time it may have given me a chance to read and comment.

I hope that future comparisons will carry both writes on the same page.

So there I said it, Yours Ian.T

Comments

This is what we usually do. I don't know why didn't Ron submitted it to the stream, but I've linked Wesley to where it is as it was submitted among the comments on the same page of the Workshop.This is a good point and deserves more attention in the coming future from the participants of the WS.

Here is the link of Ron's poem (off network)
http://www.neopoet.com/comment/89539#comment-89539

and here is the Scott's re-write
http://www.neopoet.com/workshop/poems/network-rewrite-bluedemon77-relati...

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