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I assume (edit)

A tip with greens and tangerines
attach to some large thing beyond
the frame's geometry, for granted
and on blue

Mathematical? Not like the hour
I look away from what is crumpled,
and see nothing

And I assume

the garden chairs still lie about
Crickets in what I thought was
grass,- (their number troubles
me), but one

Beneath the cotton parasol

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
A slight edit of an old write. Thanks for reading. e.

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Some interesting contradictions that draw my attention Doorman.

Good read,

Julie

D.D.

Julie

D.D.

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Hi Julie,

Thanks for reading, though I'm curious as to where you read these contradictions. Always interesting to see things through the eyes of others.

Best regards,

Espen.

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I remember writing this in my room. Looking out of the window there's a fruit tree revealed only by a branch that dips into the square frame(depending where you sit, of course), with the backdrop of the blue sky. From here things get vague, but it has to do with relying on memory to confirm unseen surroundings and how fragile that can be. To me, memory and imagination are closely linked, and the less I remember the more I assume,- to the point where whatever rests in the garden below, or under that parasol becomes strange, perhaps even frightening.
So, to answer your question would be to betray the question in the write. However, I'm very pleased that you asked because my memory of that morning has become more hazy and I'm more inclined to ask myself the same question.

Explaining poems can be a real killer, but this is a workshop after all. Kill your darlings is a good way to grow.

Hope this was helpful, and don't hold back any other questions you might have.

Best regards,

Espen.

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A sincere thanks to you for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed the write.

Best wishes,

Espen.

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"Not like the hour
I look away from what is crumpled,
and see nothing"

Something about these that just allows one's mind to wander past limits of where it has been before, or thinks boundaries were limits, when there are really no boundaries at all.

Victor

"When a pickpocket meets a holy man all he sees are his pockets."

Unknown (at least to me)

It's refreshing to hear one's lines being bent in new directions. Thanks for sharing your view. It's greatly appreciated.

Best regards,

Espen.

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Thank you, once more, for your treasured attention.

Yours,

Espen.

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