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Please me darling!

Submitted by loved on Tue, 2014-01-28 14:36

At times when
we want to please
all people
we make our lives
biggest mistake

we can't please each
and
every one of 7.5 billion,
if we can't please ourselves
who else

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Rula

Tue, 2014-02-04 01:44

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Pleasing every one is simply the impossible mission.
I feel this needs a bit working to give it a more poetic voice
but perhaps it's only me.
Thanks for sharing.

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loved

Tue, 2014-02-04 11:17

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it's my laziness
which drags along with me
and
then anchors all my poetry

loved

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