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I'm Tired

I'm tired with these dopey eyes,
About things I have no control,
Weary teary why cry?
Kill me I'm losing my compose.

I'm taking sleeping meds feeling dope,
Trying to function with the rest of the family,
I fell short everytime, feeling like a loser with no hope,
I can't get it right no natter what I Inframe.

I feel sick with every heart skip,
I wanna cry, but tears cleanses nothing,
Tears won't quench the fire in my tits,
My kindness ain't for others to take for fronting.

I'm tired and feeling lonely,
In a world of hurt and phonies.

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Good to see you post your poetry, which I believe is after a longish gap. I too made a come back here after a long gap.

This one is pretty dark and relates to the state of mind of a person on sedatives. Perhaps some of the words such as "compose" instead of "composure" could be deliberate. to show the aberration of a sedated mind. I feel this poem does effectively communicate that, though I could be wrong in my perception.. Looking forward to read more of your poems.

regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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I didn't realized people could tell you are sedated when your write.
People seem to like me better this way. I actually share something i'm interested in and people find it something good to know that they didn't already know. For the first i wasn't call a know it all..
I hurt way less. I hurt my neck years ago and it don't hurt as much. I still can't get stuff right at home though. I'm just a dummy.
Thanks for reading my poem. I'm see you like it. You got it right. i am on med for anxiety to sleep. that may be what you discern.
how is it written, does it flow. does it have an image".

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I really don't discern as you probably thought and I apologize for making you think that way and stand corrected.

Your poem certainly creates good imagery and in fact got to me in the context of relating with the situation created by your word usage.It also flows well with the theme. As I said before I will look forward to read more of your posts...

warm regards and best wishes to get well..

raj (sublime_ocean)

thanks for reading. I'm glad it flowed as I expected. I'm glad you like it. I am on medication for anxiety and insomnia. It seems to last all day as my speech drag and I'm not so jumpy. lol.
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thanks for reading. I'm glad it flowed as I expected. I'm glad you like it. I am on medication for anxiety and insomnia. It seems to last all day as my speech drag and I'm not so jumpy. lol.
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we want to please
all people
we make our life's
biggest mistake

we can't please each
and
every one of 7.5 billion ,
if we can't please ourselves
who else

loved

you're right,
we can't please anybody
not even our self
as we seek rest
from the works of life
that never cease

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and
regards

loved

I have played with this one but will PM it to you then you can play, it sounds like a lady that has had enough of everyday things and needs a space to be that lady.
I have a spare cave that I will put a beautiful light in for you,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I played with it in PM. Its nice I like it.

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hang on there. Make sure you don't overdo things, okay. If possible, try to get some help.

Alid

I hanging. thanks for friends like you all.

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about need that cataract surgery doctor told me Ill need.

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I had one of my eyes done a couple of years ago, it is great i can see without glasses on that side, I remember my Mother sitting watching TV without glasses at 86 years old and there was me wearing glasses and still trying to see what was going on lol.
If you can have at least one done you don't have to wait to go blind before its done.
You take care and know we are here for you always just talk to us.
Yours as always Ian.T

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So find more reasons to believe in others..

Right now it's in one eye. Hope to get it done. Still groggy from meds right now.

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Right now it's in one eye. Hope to get it done. Still groggy from meds right now.

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