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Unrequited love

Submitted by loved on Tue, 2014-01-21 23:17

Unrequited love
Something to do
my unrequited love

the desire to unite once again,
to fill an empty space

love falls down a flowery lane
hope you will pick up the lost strains
of petals strewn
and come again
my Valentine
will you

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Ian.T

Wed, 2014-01-29 03:38

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We all carry a flag for someone outside of our day to day existence, it is the norm, but as this says we can take a sneaky dig at it on Feb 14 if only to step outside of our normal ways.
Good write though could do with a tidy ups, Yours Ian.T

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loved

Wed, 2014-01-29 10:14

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no one read this
will tidy up as u suggest
thanks Ian

loved

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