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When you are alone --------------minor ed

Talk to the sun
look yourself up
in the mirror of time

we all age,
the world’s only a stage,
why rage,

read a library book
page by page
then

meditate, meditate, meditate

read my left over ones today,
you have a long, long, long way

come and smile
as I comment on yours,
in my imitable way

okay

talk to the sun anyway
keep the clouds
out of the pathway

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Free verse
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I really like this one, but thought you need to add a line or so at the very beginning to show when do we need to do so. I'd add

Why feel lonely..
or
When you're alone...

or
you just add it as a title instead of "talk to the sun"

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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inspired
by Germia's loneliness
shall amend thanks

loved

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I am trying to get to as many poems as I can tonight I read Joes and then I noticed your comment had again become your poem, I challenge you to write something that doesn't hold any ties to this site or any others, look around yourself and tell us a little about the world that our loved resides in ;)

A lovely message to Joe though he's a wonderful man

love JC xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

You challenged me once
and
I composed
Maestro is born
Since you were away
it awaits your finale
as that was your challenge to me,

Just wait I will compose
from the Pacific
to the Red wild sea,
okay Black maybe,

The Alps, the Everest
the top New York storey
and create a mind
full of newer history

JC, what would you like to read
an epitaph,
an eulogy
or the autobiography
of Lovedly
do tell me

loved

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Honestly I've always wanted to know more about the world in which you live ...

I'm curious creature it may just kill me one day lol

Love JC xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Else it's a paradise
and
many love to migrate
to this wonderland
u know
NY
the
EMPIRE STATE AND NIAGARA*
THE GRAPES ....THE VINES
THE ORCHARDS OF CLEMENTINE
all make charming wine

*The worlds citizens want to own

Here is the wind of ease
that blows the Arctic cool breeze
makes us freeze
tis all there is to life
tis it
tc
and
compose classic poetry
you have the innate ability sis
tc
jc

loved

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