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You dance...sing...laugh and cry

You dance...sing...laugh and cry

say something more
about how you ploy
and
why life without love
doesn't belong to all
who amongst us
still are so strong

love is always in the air
why not with all poets
we must share

this site is a privilege
to be a part of
let love show the lover’s part
as we from here to there
across eternity dart

then someone will ask
are you naturally daft....

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This has the bones of a good piece,
reference to the site gives it a limited place.
The line:- "this site is a privilege"
I would make it a "sojourn" where poets walk together.
Still this is Loved and is presented so..
As the strains of "Danny Boy" drift into my mind,
I shall bid you farewell young Bard.
I shall await your future key touching with interest.
One day as the future becomes the Now,
We shall reflect on this our Sojourn.
Then say we walked together you and I.
There are many tears to come this year young Bard.
Together we shall prevail,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

There are many tears ???????to come this year young Bard.
Together we shall prevail,

dance...sing...laugh and ----------------cry last that's why Eh

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As the year unfolds you will become aware
of why there are tears to make our sight blurred
and our voices angry.
Yet the peace after will be absolute,
Yours, as always,
Ian

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Lectures here are being cancelled
as its too blooming cold
minus 27

all r freezing and u say global what...

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South Pole - 21 degrees C
USA is much colder.
Nothing to do with local weather young Bard.
UK very damn Wet as will be our winters for the future times.
Boat building Boom in the UK hits an all time high.
Cryogenics being practised by the North Americans.
Oxygen masks and face masks boom in China.
Australians being issued with maewests that are fire proof.
The sun at the moment is the brightest for a long time due to cosmic bombardment.
Hey we is under a lot of pressure, yet here in the UK Low Pressure is the problem LOL.
Take care young Bard will swim with you later or Skate????
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

to me?

No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

http://www.wsgeorge.com/

glad u could see
happy global warming
let it so be
as we can do nothing
and
god will be watching silently
come dance along with me..
welcome global warming
its freezing minus 27

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It's another hot afternoon in Accra, Ghana. Take care in the cold! :)

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No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

http://www.wsgeorge.com/

minus 27
wind chill is chilling
u enjoy the sun on our behalf also

loved

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