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Breath
Silence whispers
i can not understand
the bare tree
is significant
it knows.
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Seren
Fri, 2013-12-27 11:03
profoundly beautiful
profoundly beautiful
hope you and Barry had a lovely Christmas
love JC ~
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Ian.T
Fri, 2013-12-27 19:15
Anna
A lovely piece that sends out a frown, where the silence whispers,
Listen with care to hear the peace, It is yours.
To understand your thoughts somewhere in there, is a pure spring that sends out a love of all things, this is hard to understand.
You took the bare tree, now feel its latent love of growth, waiting for the spring, as a young child reaching out for a touch of life.
There is no need to ask the tree just feel its purpose, it is significant
it knows that it has a life, but sleeps,
Yours as always Ian.T
PS:- I hope this is what you meant??
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
raj
Sat, 2013-12-28 14:45
Ah
Hi Anna,
So much expressed in so few words in this post. A pleasure to read as almost always
raj (sublime_ocean)
billypringle
Sun, 2013-12-29 06:31
Whispered silence
Whispered silence
The tree is free
Birds are it's fruit
The Rubaiyat, Hafiz, Koan, Haiku and the American naturist school all send little tendrils into this wilderness of longing and solitude. Please place it in to context with some more pithy postings that will help contextualize this because as it stands it reminds me more of a Crouching Tiger hidden pussy type of wisdom which when uttered in social circles sends people scrambling for the toilet.
Jimm
weirdelf
Mon, 2014-01-06 12:23
you understand
better
than the bare tree knows.
You know this.
cheers,
Jess
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