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Abstract Fiasco

Submitted by brittle light on Fri, 2013-12-06 03:00

novice painters
bend and twitch
a castle,
a kiss,
a face turned two

the master's glare
turns the screws
'neath Picasso's umbrella
....bliss twists to blue

disjointed dreams
drip and fade
as bereted visions
meet
the light of day

and only the elerly laugh

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - draft

Comments

Roscoe Lane

Wed, 2013-12-18 12:04

Roscoe Lane's picture

If you wish to search for genius, first prepare for scorn. Beautifully writen. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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