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HOUR GLASS

HOUR GLASS
A sudden winter chill
stills the night
and steals the fire of day.
my light grows dim
the past fades into oblivion.
there is no place to hide
and I am lost in Time.

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Not a word or letter out of place. A darkly smoldering gem.
If you would like to hear my reading of it right click on this link.

http://vocaroo.com/i/s1zyVPA9OlYp

cheers,
Jess
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appreciated, I did hear reading.ir was read as I meant it to be understood, thanks, jess.

joe

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and we must all address you as
SIR
in caps

loved

Thanks. I don't write much lately. Appreciate your kindness.

joe

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I agree with Jess not a word out of place, its a wonderful poem I cant pick a favourite line or phrase its flawless

bravo

much love your Jayne xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Thanks, my Jane. I've been long to answer.
joe

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that shows u have
WILL POWER

loved

As always...thanks. :)

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Just beautiful.

Love Anni

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

As is your own spirit,

Love

Longobardolino

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