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weirdelf
Wed, 2013-11-13 16:59
Just the right word in just the right place.
Just the right workshop at just the right time, looking forward to it.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Seren
Sat, 2013-11-16 05:40
Stan
Looking forward to this one :)
love JC x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
eightmenout
Mon, 2013-11-18 09:03
Stan
Sounds like a very beneficial workshop. If you would, please save a spot for me.
thanks,
Scott
Scott
scribbler
Mon, 2013-11-18 20:57
Hi Scott
You will be a most welcome participant...............stan
William Saint George
Wed, 2013-11-20 14:33
This sounds interesting. I'll
This sounds interesting. I'll join in.
No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot
http://www.wsgeorge.com/
scribbler
Wed, 2013-11-20 17:09
Hi William
Great! I'll get you listed now. I think we'll all have fun and maybe even become better poets...........stan
scribbler
Tue, 2013-11-26 15:21
Hi Eph
I am well aware that we all have limited time. But you can still pop in on occasion if you wish and perhaps join in on my next shop..........stan
loved
Sun, 2013-11-24 18:49
Stan
thanks Stan .....
thanks for your great thought
but my knowledge about poetry,
as u know is minus zero ....
as is the snow here
but I will join as you say ....
with the option
to withdraw if you permit as and when my
idiocy is becoming too predominant
I am a fee---verser
off the cuff poet
as you know
I'd wish to learn though
loved
Ian.T
Sun, 2013-11-24 19:05
Stan
I will try to keep up with this one, so just bear with me and add my name, Take care yours Ian.T
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scribbler
Sun, 2013-11-24 21:48
hello Ian
I will gladly add your name. Be sure to read the syllabus before we begin. Hopefully we'll all have some fun while we teach one another................stan
Emina Smajevic
Mon, 2013-11-25 06:15
As I've already said I'm in
As I've already said I'm in
thanks Stan
Emina
Maybe it's better to stay completely within
as fire hides in metal
as water hides in rock.
Rumi
scribbler
Mon, 2013-11-25 19:42
Hi
I'll get you on the list now. Hope you have fun and feel free to ask questions if you have them.............stan
scribbler
Mon, 2013-11-25 20:05
Welcome everybody!
We are going to start by my posting a lesser known poem by Robert Frost. In keeping with the spirit of this shop I will change a minimum of one word per stanza and a maximum of three words per stanza. DO NOT LOOK UP THE ORIGINAL POEM! That would be cheating lol. At the end of our discussion of this poem I will post the original poem so we can all see what the difference is between the right word and the ok words which I will inject.
Ya'll's job is to try to spot the words which have been changed and to leave a comment on which words and where they are. Now as quick as my index finger can type I'll post the poem below:
GOOD HOURS by Robert Frost
I had for my cold evening walk
no one at all with whom to talk
but I had the houses in a row
up to their eyes in shining snow
And I felt I had the ones within
I heard the sound of a violin
I had a glimpse through curtain laces
of youthful forms and happy faces
I had such company outward bound
I went until there were no cottages found
I turned and repented, but coming back
I saw no window except black
Over the creaking snow my feet
disturbed the sleeping village street
like something profane by your leave
'twas ten o'clock on a winter eve
OK folks have at it.I've been up since 4 o'clock this morning and it's 8 o'clock in the evening now. I'll do a quick check in before I retire and check in again in the morning. PS to all free verse writers;don't worry I'll be posting a free verse poem which has been altered later in the week. PPS feel free to explain why any word you think has been changed isn't quite right...................stan
eightmenout
Tue, 2013-11-26 00:05
my take
s1 l1 cold -just felt like there was a better word. rhythm was also off
s2 l2 heard - again felt like there was a more descriptive word
s3 l4 except - This one was a sore thumb. Also changed rhythm
s4 l1 over -just grasping at straws
I feel like there is more but only because Stan said between 1 and 3 per stanza
Scott
scribbler
Tue, 2013-11-26 09:24
Thanks scott
There Are more. But don't worry they'll all come out before it's over.............stan
loved
Tue, 2013-11-26 10:46
My take Stan ...ere all else reveal first
GOOD HOURS by Robert Frost………. Good Hours..Caps title is Stan style.
I had for my cold evening walk
no one at all with whom to talk……….Should be ''NONE..''two words as one…
but I had the houses in a row….. had?.... Not a good word..may be ...held…..
up to their eyes in shining snow
And I felt I had the ones within ……….And ……..redundant delete it
I heard the sound of a violin
I had a glimpse through curtain laces…a glimpse ''glimpses'' as one doesn’t glimpse once only
of youthful forms and happy faces
I had such company outward bound
I went until there were no cottages found
I turned and repented, but coming back …comma is redundant ,before a but Also too many I’s!
I saw no window except black
Over the creaking snow my feet…… Over seems questionable?
disturbed the sleeping village street
like something profane by your leave
'twas ten o'clock on a winter eve…winter’s ….winter must show possession
Please note ..
Too many I’s in this poem …smacks of Frost’s ego… could be reduced in original..
loved
scribbler
Tue, 2013-11-26 15:13
Hi loved
I think you are beginning to get the idea of how just a few words can affect the flow and impact of a poem. But you will be suprised at which words were and weren't changed I think. ..................stan
loved
Tue, 2013-11-26 16:06
We all learn ..I am in the incubation of the womb
just being transformed
from nothing two
to mixed one
final
loved
loved
loved
Wed, 2013-11-27 16:55
Number of participants (limit): 12 people
why people???
and why not students ,poets prospective poets
all people don't even read poetry
Would you like to rethink
Stan Sir
loved
scribbler
Wed, 2013-11-27 22:01
hi
Aren't poets also people?...............stan
loved
Wed, 2013-11-27 22:19
yes they r
but people are not poets
loved
Rula
Tue, 2013-11-26 11:46
hello Stan
Thanks for the invitation.
Please consider me in if you can bear with me as my time is very limited due to some family commitments, but I'll do my best in sha'a Allah.
Thanks again.
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Valyrianne
Tue, 2013-11-26 13:52
Hello all...
How do I join or apply for a workshop and what all does it entail?
much <3,
V
weirdelf
Tue, 2013-11-26 14:08
you are in
just read the syllabus and the first exercise is under way
http://www.neopoet.com/comment/96278#comment-96278
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Valyrianne
Tue, 2013-11-26 14:12
Thank you so much!!!
Have a lovely day!
much <3,
V
scribbler
Tue, 2013-11-26 15:19
Hello Valria
You are most welcome here. Please check out the syllabus so you will be awareof what's going on then read the above Frost poem and join in the commenting.....................stan. PS if you have questions feel free to ask. If I'm not immediately available either weirdelf (Jess) or serendipity (Jayne) will probably be there to answer. Have fun and I hope we can all learn from one another........................
scribbler
Tue, 2013-11-26 15:25
Thanks Jess
For filling in in signing up. My time like everybody else's is limited and the quicker a person is signed up the better..............stan
loved
Wed, 2013-11-27 22:20
no further inputs as yet slow no?
Give them all a time frame
48 hours max
loved
Emina Smajevic
Thu, 2013-11-28 07:42
Hi guys,
Hi guys,
He speaks about snow and there's not a word winter in the beginning of the poem that's a bit weird to me
so maybe
s1 l1: winter evening walk
the rest of the first stanza seems correct
s2 I really don't know what you've changed I'm gonna think a bit more
s3 l4 : I also think the word except is wrong, simply sounds different from the rest
s4 l2: ''sleeping'' is too simple
this is difficult stan... I'm gonna think more
Emina
Maybe it's better to stay completely within
as fire hides in metal
as water hides in rock.
Rumi
scribbler
Thu, 2013-11-28 09:37
Hello
It's kinda amazing how a poem can sound a little "off" just by changing a few words isn't it? We'll all know which were changed the first of next week but you're welcome to keep looking..........stan
Emina Smajevic
Fri, 2013-11-29 16:11
Yes Stan, you're completely
Yes Stan, you're completely right . I can hardly wait to see the original.
Emina
Maybe it's better to stay completely within
as fire hides in metal
as water hides in rock.
Rumi
Seren
Thu, 2013-11-28 07:48
Stan
As you know from my PM I am busy till Monday but I have copied the above copy of good hours and I will take a look at it over the weekend and see if I cant spot the changes I don't know this poem so its going to be a challenge, looking forward to being back on Monday.
love JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
scribbler
Thu, 2013-11-28 09:40
Hi Jay
I wanted to use a Frost poem because most poets (I think) are at least a bit familiar with his stuff. But I Didn'too many people might have already read and I didn't want it too long or short. Don't overdo it this weekend and I look forward to your take..................stan
Valyrianne
Thu, 2013-11-28 11:22
ok here it goes...
S1...houses doesn't feel right...he uses cottages in s3 which seems to fit with his more romantic language tendencies
S2...hard to say exactly but I'm going to guess it is something in the second line bc the rhythm just feels off
S3...again not 100% but last line feels short
S4...feels as if the first line is mixed up...should be something like 'over the snow my creaking feet'
Again not sure...hope I did it right Lol
scribbler
Thu, 2013-11-28 17:40
helo
Your observations are pretty closr but nobody has gotten them all yet. But then I wouldn' have either given the same circumstances lol. As soon as I hear back from everybody I'll post the original with highlighted changes............stan
loved
Sun, 2013-12-01 10:35
one more look
Had I been Frost ....how I would have composed this poem
Good Hours by Robert Frost
I went for my lonely evening walk
no one at all with whom to talk
but I saw the houses in a row
up to their windows in shining snow
I felt I saw the one’s within
I heard the sound of a violin
I had glimpses through curtain laces
of youthful forms and happy faces
I had no company outwards bound
I went until there were no cottages found
I returned and relented coming back
I saw no windows except stark black
Over the creaking snow my feet
disturbed the sleeping village street
like something profane by your leave
'twas passed ten o'clock on a winter’s eve
PS
This site doesn't have a system of spell check and highlighting and italics like other sites
that would have helped
Unless as Jess would only expose my ignorance Do help
loved
scribbler
Fri, 2013-11-29 09:24
hello
One of the things I like about Frost is the plainness of his language which makes it easy to see where alternate words could be used. But the alternates almost would never improve the original poem.
As to the tech question you are doubtless asking the wrong man. It's about all I can manage to turn on the comp. and type with my sore index finger lol.............stan
loved
Fri, 2013-11-29 10:20
thanks
apply balm
sending some
kindly go along with age and
use index finger lesser
OK Forgot to addd on
LOL LOL LOL whatever rfol hahahaha
loved
scribbler
Sun, 2013-12-01 15:28
Hi
The system which we will use is pretty simple. We'll just capitalize all changed words.............stan
Rula
Sat, 2013-11-30 11:05
my take
S1 ... I see had is repeated twice. I think one of them is added for purpose.
S2...'And' seems not to be necessary at the beginning of that stanza.
S3... 'went' reads abit weak ..
I thought Frost would use a stronger word
S4... 'creaking snow' reads odd, at least for me.
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scribbler
Sat, 2013-11-30 22:22
Hi Rula
Good thoughts. I expect you might be suprised at the original lol............stan
Rula
Sun, 2013-12-01 05:06
this means
All my guesses are wrong?
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scribbler
Sun, 2013-12-01 15:36
LOL
No it doesn't mean that. But if I were to identify which "guesses" everyone made were wrong and which were right at this stage it would tend to influence people's ideas wouldn't it? All will be clarified when I post the original poem monday evening................stan
loved
Sat, 2013-11-30 18:47
creaking snow' reads odd, at least for me.
I also thought so ...
that's why my ? Qs mark
loved
scribbler
Sat, 2013-11-30 22:24
Hi loved
Seems few here have walked on cold dry snow and heard it creak.............stan
loved
Sun, 2013-12-01 10:27
yeah now I also agree
they say
a difference of 10 degrees centigrade
and 14 degrees fah ..
makes ice creak scientifically
So I have removed my qs mark do see
loved
Ian.T
Sun, 2013-12-01 03:06
Stan
Here's My look at this destroyed piece of work!!
GOOD HOURS by Robert Frost
I had for my cold evening walk (A cold walk ??)
no one at all with whom to talk ( At all ??)
but I had the houses in a row (I had ??)
up to their eyes in shining snow ( Eyes ??)
And I felt I had the ones within (I had again ??)
I heard the sound of a violin ( No sense with Line 1??)
I had a glimpse through curtain laces ( I had, I caught??)
of youthful forms and happy faces (and, With ??)
I had such company outward bound ( Had such, nonsense??)
I went until there were no cottages found (Double negative No cottages found??)
I turned and repented, but coming back ( non sense Again repent for ??)
I saw no window except black (Saw no, very bad ?? )
Over the creaking snow my feet (Ice may creak not snow.??)
disturbed the sleeping village street (Streets don’t sleep, they just lay there LOL??)
like something profane by your leave ( Profane doesn’t fit ??)
'twas ten o'clock on a winter eve (A bit too late you have wrecked this poem??)
What can I say other than this, I didn't read the other comments or looked at the original , will you put it under the one you have here when everyone has commented, Yours ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
scribbler
Sun, 2013-12-01 15:33
Hi Ian
Repent in this instance is used to designate a change of mind. And the original will be posted Monday evening. I think all will see how much better the original is than the changed version and all the result of a few minor word changes..............stan
loved
Sun, 2013-12-01 18:15
but of course
Frost wasn't some ordinary Loved !
he deserved a Nobel
loved
scribbler
Sun, 2013-12-01 19:21
Hmmm.....
I'm not certain but I don't think Frost ever won a Nobel. Shows what THEY know lol..........stan
loved
Sun, 2013-12-01 20:22
yes
I'm not certain but I don't think Frost ever won a Nobel.
Shows what THEY know ???????
yes themoonman told me as a comment
Frost never got it
But it doesn't mean all deserving guys they know or do they???
loved
loved
Sun, 2013-12-01 20:25
do wait for
Do wait for Serendipity
Time out she had asked till Monday
No?
see how actively I have been participating ....hopeful to learn more
so all know ....
.hahaahAAAA
LOL LOL LOL whatever also Rfol
loved
scribbler
Mon, 2013-12-02 09:54
Yes
We're awaiting Jayne who has had a death in her family. I'm hardly going to rush anybody who is dealing with such.........stan
loved
Mon, 2013-12-02 10:16
all the best for ur next
elections
ur my man Stan always
as u r good positive kind methodical humorist and well of course to the point
except
when I put you off
loved
scribbler
Mon, 2013-12-02 18:40
hi
I'm not sure if being elected would be good luck or if not being elected would lol. But I appreciate your support and expect those who have been carrying the torch a while would like a break..............stan
scribbler
Mon, 2013-12-02 19:17
Here is the original with noted changes
Good Hours
I had for my winter evening walk..........changed winter to cold
no one at all with whom to talk
but I had the cottages in a row............changed cottages to houses
up to their shining eyes in snow
And I thought I had the folk within.........changed thought to felt
i had the sound of a violin
I had a glimpse through curtain laces
of youthful forms and youthful faces............changed youthful to happy
I had such company outward bound
I went till there were no cottages found
I turned and repented,but coming back
I saw no window but that was black...... changed but that was to except
Over the snow my creaking feet .....instead of change here, I rearranged..over the creaking snow my feet
disturbed the slumbering village street........changed slumbering to sleeping
like profanation, by you leave.....changed profanation to something profane
at ten o'clock of a winter eve.....changed at to twas
Alright, now you can see which changes ya'll found and which ones you didn't. You can also see that there can be many ok words but few "perfect "ones. . You might also not that Frost broke a lot of what many consider rules" nowadays. He used a lot of "I"'s. He also repeated cottages fairly closely.and youthful within the same line. But this poem shows how the right word should take precidence over assumed rules.
I am about to posy a short free verse poem but this is a good time to state your ideas on the use of different words in this poem and why the substitutes don't work as well as the originals............stan
eightmenout
Mon, 2013-12-02 22:39
Stan
Just a couple comments on the poem. S2 L2 also had a change - "had" to "heard"
Also, the syllabus stated that there would be 1 to 3 word changes per stanza. S4 had a change in each line.
Thanks,
Scott
Scott
scribbler
Tue, 2013-12-03 07:38
Hi scott
Always nice to have my feet held to the fire lol. I guess I got a bit carried away in S-4. Must have wanted to give ya'll more chances to find changes. I'm embarassed to say that the change in S-2, L-2 was result of a typo........stan
Ian.T
Mon, 2013-12-02 19:30
Stan
It is late here so I will sort out things tomorrow. Frost was born 68 years to the day before me:-
Robert Lee Frost [1874-1963] was born in California USA on 26th March 1874. His parents William Prescott Frost and Isabel Moodie,
Maybe I should be able to connect with him lol,
See you on the morrows sun time,
Yours Ian.T
Good Hours
I had for my winter evening walk—
No one at all with whom to talk,
But I had the cottages in a row
Up to their shining eyes in snow.
And I thought I had the folk within:
I had the sound of a violin;
I had a glimpse through curtain laces
Of youthful forms and youthful faces.
I had such company outward bound.
I went till there were no cottages found.
I turned and repented, but coming back
I saw no window but that was black.
Over the snow my creaking feet
Disturbed the slumbering village street
Like profanation, by your leave,
At ten o'clock of a winter eve.
Robert Frost
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
scribbler
Mon, 2013-12-02 21:09
Hi Ian
I appreciate the bio but remember this shop is about the poetry, not the poet lol. .................stan
Ian.T
Tue, 2013-12-03 03:47
Badness Stan
I saw that you had put the original poem on here but to me it was a bit hard to read so I put a clean one in my comment.
The Bio well it is my anniversary??? apart from that it is good to know a little about the poet, as his poems reflect his thoughts therefore his life. An American at that..
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
scribbler
Tue, 2013-12-03 07:42
Hi Ian
I wasn't chastising you about the bio. Just didn't want anybody to be led into different areas which this shop isn't covering. Personally, the more I can learn about Frost the better...............stan
weirdelf
Mon, 2013-12-02 23:41
What did you write on your 68th birthday, Ian?
What did you write on your 68th birthday, Ian?
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Ian.T
Tue, 2013-12-03 03:41
Jess
At that time I was writing a few bits for Neopoet and upsetting our loving Jess lol I would need to go into my archives to find those pieces and it would be too much trouble.
Since then I have learnt a great deal on this site, though it may not show that much lol.
Frost and me cover 139 years..
Take care out there Jess and know that we think of you,
Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
loved
Mon, 2013-12-02 20:03
bravo for
Frost
he never followed rules ...
loved
loved
Mon, 2013-12-02 20:10
well I get
0/10 bad start ....
except that you also say
Frost used too many I's so give me just a mark
and one more for not following rules =2/10
what say u master?
loved
scribbler
Mon, 2013-12-02 21:13
Hi Loved
We're not keeping score so don't worry about that. Perhaps you will fare better in the free verse below. Now the thing about knowing the rules is realizing when breaking them is a good thing. I expect Frost was fully aware of the flaws in his poetry but I'm also of the mind to think he knew exactly what he was doing when he broke them. (unlike myself who just breaks them out of ignorance)..............stan
loved
Mon, 2013-12-02 21:23
the biggest quality in a man is
to be able to laugh at himself
and u have abundantly
overflowing ...
of a such a quality
god bless u
with new AEC
C H A I R
loved
scribbler
Wed, 2013-12-04 08:49
free verse poem
Grass by Carl Sandburg
Stack the bodies high at Austerlitz and Warterloo
shovel them deep and let me start---
I am green grass, I conceal all
And pile them high at Gettysburg
then pile them higher at Ypres and Verdum
Put them under and let me work
Two years, two decades, and passersby will inquire
what place is this?
where are we?
I am the grass
let me grow
So,,,,,let's examine this short free verse and let me know what doesn't seem quite right.
Now is also a good time to start thinking about which of your own poems you will be submitting in hopes that we can find a few word changes that might make a big difference.................stan
eightmenout
Mon, 2013-12-02 22:47
Stan
S1 L2 - start
S1 L3 - conceal
S2 L1 - is it "hight" or "high"
S2 L1 - And
S2 L3 - put
S2 L4 - passersby
S3 L2 - let
Scott
scribbler
Wed, 2013-12-04 08:51
Hi Scott
Me and my damned typos lol. HIGH. Well you got some wrong and some right. We will now await others' input...........stan
scribbler
Wed, 2013-12-04 23:26
Hmmm......
Nobody seems to want to discuss why the changes in Frost's poem don't work as well as the original. Perhaps it's confusion as to what is expected. So I'll start off by discussing the first change where cold was substituted for winter. The word cold is not specific in setting the time of year when the walk was taken. "Cold" could be a cold spring or autumn day as well as winter. By stating right at the beginning that it was winter, the stage is set and the reader prepared for what was to follow. Also there's the rhythm thing . Winter gives a perfect scansion match to the 3rd line while cold (although it sounds ok within this first line) doesn't quite match up...............stan
eightmenout
Fri, 2013-12-06 14:17
Taking a look at the second
Taking a look at the second word change "cottages" to "houses" -- The word change not only moved the location, it also changed the time period. Cottages gives it more of a village type feel as opposed to a neighborhood feeling of house. That being said, I felt the change brought the poem into a modern time period which took away some of its grandeur.
Scott
scribbler
Fri, 2013-12-06 19:15
Hi
I agree. also cottages paints a picture of smaller more intimate dwellings.................stan
scribbler
Mon, 2013-12-09 18:21
OOO KKKKK.........
Either I have offended everybody here by accident or this shop has become boring. Whichever is the case, I will close this up unless we start getting happening here. I don't want to put ya'll through something which you're not enjoying.......................stan
loved
Mon, 2013-12-09 19:35
I think.. I;m not alone
any one can change any word
who knows
what was in the mind of that poet
Sorry Stan
I'd still hold on
loved
scribbler
Mon, 2013-12-09 22:02
Here is the original
Check the changes if you want but then read the following change in shop format.........
Grass by Carl Sandburg
Pile the bodies high at Austerlitz and Waterloo
Shovel them under and let me work....
I am the grass; I cover all
And pile them high at Gettysburg
And pile them high at Ypres and Verdum
Shovel them under and let me work.
Two years, ten years, and passengers ask the conductor
What place is this?
Where are we now?
I am the grass
Let me work
scribbler
Fri, 2014-01-03 14:07
My apologies
Due to lack of interest I think it best that I close this shop. I place all blame for its lack of success entirely on myself. I apparently failed at keeping it interesting enough to keep folks responding. .............stan
weirdelf
Fri, 2014-01-03 19:46
[confiscates Stan's big stick he was beating himself up with]
Workshops are not an exact science, to put it mildly. I once ran a small video production company called JNP. They were our initials but the inside joke was it stood for "Jump'n'pray"
You have run some of our best workshops ever Stan so I'm keeping that big stick, in case I actually need to use it on you [grins].
And even if this shop has lost momentum it was still very valuable to all who participated. Thank you.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
raj
Fri, 2014-01-03 14:57
Stan, from the mental picture
Stan, from the mental picture I have of you, I don't mean the physical picture but the person within that frame, I believe you have expressed your disappointment with what you may have expected the workshop to be in terms of level of participation. However, I agree with Jess, even if it has helped a few it has served the purpose. It would be nice if those who were benefited through this exercise express so to Stan, even if it is in the form of messages.
Cheer up Stan
raj (sublime_ocean)
scribbler
Fri, 2014-01-03 19:04
Hi Raj
I've been around long enough to know that not everything a person does will turn out as well as he/she expected. So there's not really any need to try cheering me up as I'm not "down in the dumps" about this in a personal level. But I am sorry that there are those who put their faith in me to only not have their expectations fulfilled. They say one learns more from their failures than successes so I was due for a good learning experience lol.........stan
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Fri, 2014-01-03 21:14
All said and done this is my next Phase contribution. Please do
say well done
as FREE verse poem
has been posted by none
except now by
the Loved one
I wanted to have a cup of tea with you today
It was a very sunny day
clear skies
no clouds
but freezing winds were not silent,
only minus 37
the temperature was only
minus twenty seven
I walked across my garden of Eden
with knee deep snow laden
just about over a mile
All alone
gasping for breath !
but then when I did return
I knocked at the nearest door
I am now in
do bring a pot of coffee
sizzling!
but the door bell didn't ring
the blistering storm ahead
had broken many an electric string
so I returned home
to have a drink...
next time may be..
you will offer
a cup of tea.
loved
scribbler
Fri, 2014-01-03 22:26
hello
And I thought it was cold here because the temp barely got above freezing lol. The doorbell didn't ring because I have no door bell. Next time try beating on the door. I thought about getting knockers but figured I look strange enough already lmao.........stan
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Wed, 2014-01-08 20:14
Thanks and shall
next time shall bring a hammer along
have a nice winter
we are neck deep in snow
as you know
may be buried too
before poets of Neopoet
say they knew
Any way thank you
my love for ya'll is true
borrowed ur
ya'll
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