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the hidden thought

Submitted by twg on Tue, 2013-11-19 17:02

I caught her eyes,
She caught my eyes.
Who is to be blamed then?
Who could denounce to embrace beauty,
affirm its importance and learn its ways?
Who could in his right senses,
discard its thoughts, forget its impart and tarnish its image?

I maintain to sustain its essence in my life, with diligent effort to pass it on to posterity...twg

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Ian.T

Tue, 2013-11-19 18:18

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Sorry could not understand these two lines the logic left me some place, I shall await your reply then re read and critique better,
Yours Ian.T

Who could i his right senses,
discard its thoughts, forget its impart and tarnish its image?

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

twg

Tue, 2013-11-19 23:38

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I am so grateful sir, i guess I have corrected the error and now sounds quite meaningful....thanks for drawing ma attention.

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Ian.T

Wed, 2013-11-20 03:25

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Logic prevailed, now sense has returned..
A good theme, would need another poem to show more feelings.
Know how you feel with that one glance across a void.
Like touching something that you know will hold you always,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Lonnie

Wed, 2013-11-20 09:54

Perhaps a bit beyond my scope of understanding, but intriguing none the less! Keep on keeping on!

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