Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

The mirrors' ball

You will visit
the
ball
where everyone's faces
will be covered with masks
and I won't be able to find
you.

My face too will be
underneath the mask
and someone else
will find
me.

After,
on my way to home
I discover the masks,

you're a ghost
I'm a liar.

At home
I take my clothes off.
I'm standing in front of god,
there's a mirror in front of
me,

dead as matter
alive as process

both indestructible.

Then I lay down to sleep
wondering if that is the last
sky
the
nothing.

Night without a star
is the same night
I see
when I close my
eyes.

So it's a mask too
in front of a mirror,
of an enamel of my eyes.

And what's
behind
the mirror
is supposed to be
the
same.

I guess.

Editing stage: 

Comments

ghosts
masked each one of us
we say something mean something ...
you too do read my
mirror poem
without a mask will you
ere I welcome you

loved

thx for welcome... this was a game between the mirror or the truth and masks and sense and god and me and so on ...the way it is in the universe lovely game I think ;)
and this was without a mask otherwise it would've been the masks' ball
nice to be here, so good so far

Emina
Maybe it's better to stay completely within
as fire hides in metal
as water hides in rock.
Rumi

author comment

Thanks Beauregard and you're right, you got the point and it was like the last sky is the nothing so don't bother yourself about that, things before are much more interesting. I'm gonna change few things to make it clearer and it's not easy to go deep and stay simple but I always try to be as simple as possible.

Emina
Maybe it's better to stay completely within
as fire hides in metal
as water hides in rock.
Rumi

author comment

This write as your first one needs just a little more openness as Beau says.
There seems to be a hidden underflow that needs words to bring it out, these are your thoughts again, as with your first poem, don't be afraid to shout out your thoughts they are unique, and your writing is very good, Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thanks Ian, honestly I keep my writing more for myself than others and probably that's why I'm sometimes confusing but I'm working on it and your comments mean a lot and I think you're right about the other poem my thoughts should run slower I like the way you changed it.

I guess at some point I am afraid, I'm different. ;)

Emina
Maybe it's better to stay completely within
as fire hides in metal
as water hides in rock.
Rumi

author comment
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.