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Vocal haiku 1
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Seriously, do you think this might be a path worth pursuing, if I learned a little restraint and effectiveness on the effects?
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mand
Thu, 2013-11-14 06:57
It sounded quite eerie - I
It sounded quite eerie - I think it would be very effective - it was like a watery echo - it would be interesting to see how you will/can develop it as a poetic vocal art form!
Love Mand xxx
weirdelf
Thu, 2013-11-14 16:31
ta
Mand
cheers,
Jess
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author commentSeren
Sat, 2013-11-16 05:57
Jess
In my opinion the effects were over done I couldn't understand what was being said I even put the headphones on and still the quality wasn't good enough for me to hear what was being said I will try again later it maybe my connection
take care JC x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
mand
Mon, 2013-11-18 11:45
Hi Jess
I agree with JC - it was incomprehensible but has potential.
weirdelf
Fri, 2013-11-22 02:44
thanks Jayne and Beau
yep, effects are like garlic, great slave, terrible master. Gonna do an online course because the whole "word sound sculpture" concept intrigues me.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
author commentweirdelf
Fri, 2013-11-22 05:11
gotcha, yes, makes perfect sense.
I always get tremendously excited at the prospect of learning something new or refining my understanding of something. The trouble is that although I'm not tone deaf, I love music, I don't think I have a very subtle ear. Sound tracks were always difficult for me when film-making. Ah well, I do have a good ear for poetry so, nothing ventured etc.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
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