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V I O L E T * C A S C A D E * F O N T

Submitted by Esker on Thu, 2013-11-14 14:59

spacial
lows

the seperate
apex
like a soulful fulcrum
under stress

the delicate
music
of this flex

calling
in its voice
of wavelength

the saturation depths
alight

If I was a comfort
in the feilds of snow
the scatter
of that haze

it was buried
drawn fast
beneath
the fury

lost chaste post
to the new age
orders
tucked neat

falling like the
orchid cold
fast of evening

a ghost of
colour

requiems
in admissions
metered

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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mand

Fri, 2013-11-15 03:14

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Just beautiful - intense and something to behold. What a talent you have!!

A small typo .."fields" me thinks.

Love Mand xxx

Ian.T

Fri, 2013-11-15 03:58

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I agree with Mand totally even to the typo.
Take care and keep them coming, Yours Ian.T

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Esker

Fri, 2013-11-15 14:37

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admittance to being wrong
cold and involved when I could
have taken the moment
and been open
warmer..caring..softer

the windmill jousting more important
and now finding the ghosts
wounded while walking at dusk
a quiet time to appease
assuage the old wounds

an amazing time when the lights come
on..the snow falls..that colour from
the east and west before nightfall
when the first stars are igniting

Thank You fellow poets!
thank you...

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lonlyhrtsclub13

Fri, 2013-11-15 21:33

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My favorite color other than black
The tint in my hair
Cascading in waves

Beautiful write
Amazing color
Well done

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Seren

Sat, 2013-11-16 05:53

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There is a stark feeling to this one a feeling of disconnection, I really liked the ending I think it could do with some punctuation to emphasize the stanza's but its another wonderful write but we have come to expect nothing less :)

love JC xxx

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Geezer

Sat, 2013-11-16 19:21

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I see in you; the Don Q. side. Your metaphors' are spot on and I like how you link words of a kin, to deliver the message, even though it might not be apparent during the first read. I also love your comments that often explain what prompted the poem. Always, ~ Gee

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Esker

Sat, 2013-12-07 00:50

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a stone in a sling
circling a belief
defending its concepts
of structure......

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