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Homesick too

1 in 5 stars may have "Goldilocks"
(Earth similar)
planets.

There are around 300 billion stars in the Milky Way.
There are around 250 billion galaxies in the universe.
We have absofuckinglutely no idea how many universes there might be.

So just in our universe
300,000,000,000 x 250,000,000,000 ÷ 5 =
... a lot of potentially habitable planets,
and that's just for carbon based lifeforms.

So why hasn't anyone said hello?
Well we've only been sending radio/tv signals into space for 100 years,
and 100 light years is barely the flat next door.
and maybe we smell bad.

One thing is pretty sure,
if someone doesn't break the lightspeed barrier
(they said we couldn't break the sound speed barrier)

I'm going to be lonely
for a while yet.

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superlymarvelousucy

a new word you coin
I do have many too

not seen you around
since NASA has 42.billion Earths found
where will Neopoets go looking
Jess for you

hope you will leave traces
on the galaxies of space
in your....absofuckinglutely ......... verses

with your Blessings and Grace....

loved

that you enjoyed it, loved

cheers,
Jess
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need to create a
fucinfullshome
new dictionary for
nuepoetioshun

loved

A write of facts, yes there are so many like star systems like ours and the chance of being the exact as ours if it is only a billion to one would mean there are thousands ofr like systems.
Could you imagine any of those system bothering with this place we are bent on destroying.
Maybe they put us here in the first place as an experiment.
I can tell them it was a failure lol.
Great talking point though, take care yours Ian

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

could sustain life as we know it, life as we know it, life as we know it, there would still be thousands of billions of them.
Ta, Ian

cheers,
Jess
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Spot on Jess, maybe they look at us and think, ugh, no i don't think we'll visit those murdering fuckers. Planet Zogg is far more peaceful, we'll go there and have some fun instead. Thought provoking, especially the size element. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

I was wondering if the two different lines were sufficiently, or perhaps over-, counterpointing the dry, but rather staggering factoids.

cheers,
Jess
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even as disperate minds as ours think alike. This is almost a perfect free verse version of a poem I wrote a while back titled Hello.......silence lol. I think you should isolate the last word of your poem in its own line for impact. Also hyphenating life forms looks wrong somehow. BTW in a lab not too long ago there was a particle observed traveling from one point to another in zero amount of time. We may be closer to that barrier than we think...................stan

I just can't bring myself to leave 'yet' all on its lonesome, though I do appreciate and understand the suggestion.

Agree about the hyphens, they're both gone.

Yeah, I can't wait, I swear my physiology was designed for a planet with lower gravity and a 36 hour day/night cycle.
Thanks for good critical feedback man, much appreciated.

cheers,
Jess
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As light has mass, just need a bloody thin space craft to go faster.
And as to seeing yourself coming by doing that impossible to leave the NOW.
It would still take us 4 years plus to reach the nearest star, it might have exploded two years ago do we really want to talk about it LOL.
Think travels instantly so if you can build a big think tank you will have the answer.
These distances, just be glad they are so vast otherwise our governments would go and make a bloody mess of them, Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

http://www.nasa.gov/.../glenn/technology/warp/ideachev.html

I mean really, click on the link and read the page. We are closer than you might think.

cheers,
Jess
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To butt in. The fallacy in trying to accellerate something to the speed of light lies in the fact that the mass of the object increases with the increase in speed until the mass would require more fuel to accellerate further than the galaxy holds. In the aforementioned lab experiment the change in the particle's position was not at the speed of light, it was instantaneous. It was here then it was there with no time passage. The theory is that the particle exited our universe then re-entered at a different location. Was this via an Einstein-Rosen bridge (wormhole) or a journey through a different deminsion? The scientists might know but I sure don't lol.

But if we coukld do the same as the particle going to the nearest (or Any) star would be instant...........stan

perhaps 'obstacle'? Yes, we understand the difficulty, hence my reference to the NASA research.

Re that pesky simultaneous particle, can you give me any sort of reference? I'd love to read up on it.

I did a bit of research and can only find references to observing the instantaneous velocity of particles, which is pretty ground-shaking in itself but not instantaneous movement.

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Jess
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If you see the snap posted by NASA of the mountain on MARS …and you just imagine how long it has taken us to snap that…. you can visualize and see that now in less than no… nil... seconds...So thought be the ultimate solution… to reach or otherwise …the far folds of an ever expanding infinity …man will, yes will, NEVER REACH..as infinity continues to move further as Shakespeare said …time never stands still. What then is time? I ask…

loved

and reflect that this dialogue is happening on a poetry page. Perhaps this "poem" achieved something after all.

cheers,
Jess
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I think I read the article that your quoting from, I often wonder when we will be visited again I believe they have been here before we just weren't ready for them and maybe they will decide we never will be, I hope that's not the case, I often wonder what they will look like and where their evolution will have taken them look at the millions of creatures on this planet, we will have never dreamed them, if it ever happens, the meeting, I would love to be alive.

thought provoking poetry I cant see anything to offer or suggest and I thoroughly enjoyed the shared information in the above comments I found out things I hadn't known.

seems like you've had a "not from this earth feeling"

take care JC x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

yes, I've had that feeling all my life.

But tell me. Do you think I should rewrite this with with more discipline, in a more poetic form?
I am honestly not sure if I am being lazy or whether the format works to emphasise my intent.

cheers,
Jess
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I think the first bit is a little clinical I could do with some poetic flare, I don't know that your being lazy I think like me, you are searching for that voice

take care JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

I've had several quire effective ones before now.

Seriously on this particular poem does the purposely dry content effectively counterpoise the subtext?

cheers,
Jess
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not so much looking for a new voice but maybe searching for the sound or music of words that's worked so well in the past, I lost it a little bit but I am slowly finding myself again.

(Seriously on this particular poem does the purposely dry content effectively counterpoise the subtext?)

it does in a way I guess I am looking for something that's probably not meant to be there.

take care JC x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

If you're looking hard I failed to convey it.

cheers,
Jess
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Or maybe i cant see for looking. The poem is thought provoking look at the comments above mine that says it all.

JC x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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