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First attempt at Dactylic - bottom line workshop

Submitted by mand on Sat, 2013-10-12 13:33

Beautiful, bountiful, beleaguered princesses,
tortured and tormented, exhibit tolerance.
Patiently, presenting amazing fortitude.                           
Constantly forgiving horrible attitudes.

Beau..ti..ful / boun..ti..ful, / bel..eagu..ered / prin..cess.es,
tor..tured and / tor..ment..ed, / ex..hib..it / tol..er..ance.
Pa..tient..ly / pre..sent..ing / am..a..zing / for..ti..tude.
Con..stant..ly / for..giv..ing / horr..i..ble / att..i..tudes.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Workshop: 
The Bottom Line

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Rula

Sat, 2013-10-12 13:50

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using the boldface would be easier to show how you are scanning your quatrain dear Mand

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mand

Sat, 2013-10-12 14:06

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Been trying, but not having much success. I manage to embolden the stressed words, using control B, but when I try to save it goes badly out of line. I suspect I'm doing something wrong. All part of the learning process I guess. It's o.k I managed it!

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Rula

Sun, 2013-10-13 09:04

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first line
Bea-uti-ful|, boun-ti-ful,| be-lea-guered |prin-cess- es ,(prin-CESS-es)
Second line
tor-tured and| tor-ment-ed,| ex-hi-bit| to-le-          rance          .(to-LE-rence)
third line
Pa-tient-ly|, pre-sen-ting| ama-z-ing |for-tit-ude.  
fourth line                       
Con-stan-tly |for-gi-ving |ho-rri-ble |a-tti-tudes 

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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Rula

Sun, 2013-10-13 09:12

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the advanced formating sometimes goes mad and refuse to remove the format. I used to CAPITAL for the accented and the small for non-accented.

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