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INTERVENTION
To err is human
to lead is but natural
to fight and win
is a desire
of all normal
only the brave bold and beautiful
differ,
they want to be always a leader
and
hate intervention
as we all dislike to be deferred
and
so we fight from the higher planes we exist
our position hope no one alters
nor us does desist
Style / type:
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Ian.T
Fri, 2013-09-20 18:37
Loved
You started with a cliche the words were OK after that, then you missed the opportunity to use an old word like " doth " at the end, you slippeth young Bard we are waiting for the sun to light a new great piece or two..
Yours Ian.T
does desist
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
loved
Tue, 2013-09-24 21:39
to err is human ...how doth thou sayest
to err is human ...how doth thou sayest
thou Ian
and thy where dostith cometh from another poetrys version
thou sleeepest like in tempest...Ian
As I return from a worldly sojourn
was absent for a week
none notestist it
not even thou
none will misseth us at all
that I doth vow!
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Ian.T
Wed, 2013-09-25 03:08
Loved
Did miss your presence LOL, Yours Ian.T
Welcome back..
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
mand
Wed, 2013-09-25 08:16
guess we all want to do
guess we all want to do things our own way. Intervention is not always welcomed.
Interesting and thought provoking!
Love Mand xxxx
loved
Wed, 2013-09-25 10:25
thank you so very much
you do encourage me often
loved