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yearn
fault a star
heaven ridden
heart with its wear
scar turns
the burning
fire
glittering
the shadow waver
brilliant as magik
I think of you
transcribed
atop the plan
of emotion
a treasure
over lay
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Comments
Ian.T
Tue, 2013-09-24 18:52
Steve
I liked the emotion in this one to be as a turning star with its scar,
yet the other is thought of as transcribed atop the plan.
A lovely line:- "A treasure overlay"
Have a great night over there,
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
lonlyhrtsclub13
Tue, 2013-09-24 20:34
shooting star
Across a blackened sky
I think of you
Wondering if you are okay
Think of better times
When we were different
Before the bitterness
Took over
And hope left us
To go astray
Keep Writing,
Carrie
"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"
BettyBuff
Wed, 2013-09-25 18:19
"treasure over lay"
Brilliant line, brilliant pun.
Ells x
Esker
Thu, 2013-09-26 11:24
Thank Ells
happiness when the treasured minds
gleam what shard I am refracting
Pun indeed intended...
I miss this most of all
now that I am alone on my path...
loved
Thu, 2013-09-26 15:09
PAIN as much as life is borne all alone
pain as much as life
is borne all alone
as Yul Bryner hath said
''man is born
lives
and
dies alone ...'''
how truly factual
yet we ignore
loved
Esker
Fri, 2013-09-27 14:28
bliss and ignorance...
alone our mortality
but our works shine
physical attribute
weather as we are want
the dust we reside
too
but our creative fires
burn
for a time
in our gifts we recieve
from the creator Or God
etc...
lonlyhrtsclub13
Fri, 2013-09-27 15:47
our own mortality
walking hand in hand with the reaper
facing our past, our present and the end of our future
memories pass by
like a bullet train
one by one we watch them flash
time keeps on ticking
every slowly
our time a little closer
with each breath
creativity inspires
keeps us living
when in essence
we should have been dead
Keep Writing,
Carrie
"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"