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my child!

Submitted by loved on Sat, 2013-08-24 13:29

Only drips one two three
and so many more
help bring an invaluable child

God has been kind
only women get pregnant
if men could have been
none would know
how many have been....
brought to this small world
to increase a mass population,
in countries like yours
where lives are being governed
only by robots and automation

God's smaller mercy's be praised
and you Scribbler are kind..

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

Ian.T

Sat, 2013-08-24 17:05

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I read your comments as I do near all the comments on any poem I comment on so I have already read this one of yours.
Now I am going to smack your hands, I would love to see more of your poetry here on stream than the odd comment I have already read.
You take care out there and thinking cap on or just write,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Sat, 2013-08-24 20:37

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then polished poetry
is on the shaft
you call it a stream...

My Dear Ian
you can smack
as perhaps ur
used to since

drugs abuse you read
and said twas no sin

loved

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