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v a n g a u r d

Submitted by Esker on Sat, 2013-08-24 11:26

shroud the crespulant stir
miraculous shatter
diving far the depth

arriving less then better

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Geezer

Sat, 2013-08-24 15:54

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to dare! That is what I get from this. I also the know the feeling of arriving a little less better than I've wanted to. I think it is called bad planning or none at all! LOL I love that this one is so spare, but still leaving the impression.
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Raven Maelstrom

Tue, 2013-08-27 22:43

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I am reminded that brilliance can be shaded to the point of mediocrity where self-worth is questioned. Incisive. Nice fling.

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