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Self-induced

Why was I given life?
I live with the sin
I will be given no apologies from those who offend
I am a container.
a vessel of blank.
The music is dark and so is my soul
I am not given light. I do not credit the ones who show mercy.
I am evil. I am nothing.
Good for those who dwell.
Why do I continue to live?
Everything is void.
Everything.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
I feel messed up
Editing stage: 

Comments

The container can be refilled, you can do this with the things you select.
I liked the piece you wrote till I read at the bottom that you felt messed up.
Nowadays this goes hand and hand with life, it is not an easy journey but there are many that can walk with you and help with your writing.
You sound young enough to be able to study and learn the correct forms and layouts of Poetry, there is all the time in the world for young ones like you.
Read some of the classics and ask for help in as many ways as you wish this is a workshop and that's why we gather here.
Take care out there, and lets see your next Piece, see if you can find one of our mentors,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I am taking up linguistics and literature now. im not yet done with all my literature subjects though. I will take up masters (If i can support myself) after i graduate, hopefully march 2014. yes i still have a lot to learn about poetry :)

author comment

By the way, I'm glad you liked it :)

author comment

If this is part of the workshop, edit the poem and tick the box that says for workshop it will give you a choice.
Also on the right of your title just type:-
Naked Emotion, Truth and Originality this will bring it to the attention of the workshop poets.
Take care out there, and hope you do well with your work,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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